Murdered

I felt my body ripping itself apart, 
I felt your hand on my beating heart,
I felt my flesh slowly tearing away, 
I felt empty when you left me to decay.
I feel hollow now, empty like a tree.
I feel grateful that you gutted me,
I feel no pain, no anxiety, no remorse,
I feel nothing, you murdered every source.

Reviews

[M. George]

A short, but very powerful and gripping poem. I do like the structure and the (fairly) regular rhythm, and the rhyming couplets do work very affectively considering the theme of the poem. I also like the shift from "felt" to "feel" to show the narrator's shift in emotions from being alive and incredibly distraught, to feeling empty and emotionless. I really like this :)

[Britaini Gross]

I'm glad you liked it :)

[Karissa A. Kelly]

The structure and rhyme is solid, and it does a wonderful job of immersing the reader into the narration's state of mind. Well done.

[Riley McKinney]

Beautiful! I love this! I am not usually one for AA BB etc. rhyme schemes but I feel like you used it perfectly and with perfect rhythm. Many times if find AA BB rhyme schemes to be underdeveloped. That is not the case for your poem!

[Peyton Light]

Very nice. I perfer shorter poems like this. Despite it's short length you still captured me with the words you use. The way that it went from "felt" to "feel" was very well done. I am glad I clicked on this :)

[Danae Evmorfidis]

This is amazing, it really get's to you :)

[Asra Hakak]

short and nice, rhyme scheme is commendable and its great to see how briefly you covered each and every point
this indeed is a good write up