Murdered

Murdered

A Poem by Britaini Gross

I felt my body ripping itself apart, 
I felt your hand on my beating heart,
I felt my flesh slowly tearing away, 
I felt empty when you left me to decay.
I feel hollow now, empty like a tree.
I feel grateful that you gutted me,
I feel no pain, no anxiety, no remorse,
I feel nothing, you murdered every source.

© 2015 Britaini Gross



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A short, but very powerful and gripping poem. I do like the structure and the (fairly) regular rhythm, and the rhyming couplets do work very affectively considering the theme of the poem. I also like the shift from "felt" to "feel" to show the narrator's shift in emotions from being alive and incredibly distraught, to feeling empty and emotionless. I really like this :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Britaini Gross

1 Year Ago

I'm glad you liked it :)



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Beautiful! I love this! I am not usually one for AA BB etc. rhyme schemes but I feel like you used it perfectly and with perfect rhythm. Many times if find AA BB rhyme schemes to be underdeveloped. That is not the case for your poem!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Very nice. I perfer shorter poems like this. Despite it's short length you still captured me with the words you use. The way that it went from "felt" to "feel" was very well done. I am glad I clicked on this :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


This is amazing, it really get's to you :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

short and nice, rhyme scheme is commendable and its great to see how briefly you covered each and every point
this indeed is a good write up

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A short, but very powerful and gripping poem. I do like the structure and the (fairly) regular rhythm, and the rhyming couplets do work very affectively considering the theme of the poem. I also like the shift from "felt" to "feel" to show the narrator's shift in emotions from being alive and incredibly distraught, to feeling empty and emotionless. I really like this :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Britaini Gross

1 Year Ago

I'm glad you liked it :)

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Added on November 25, 2015
Last Updated on November 25, 2015
Tags: death, emotions, dark, murder

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Britaini Gross
Britaini Gross

Piedmont, SC



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I've always loved literature, even when I was too little to read my grandfather enlightened me with poems from around the world. Sylvia Plath is my favorite writer and my idol. I've never published an.. more..

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