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my first heartbreak

my first heartbreak

A Poem by BritishLotus

looking up reaching my arms up i cant touch it
i cant grasp it , im falling faster and faster deeper
deeper into this darkness at the bottom of this world
i see the light fading  so fast too fast for me
this happened like a dream i was sleep i was sleep 
instead of living my reality i was living this dream
this dream where me and you are happy we are whole
but that was so long ago, rememeber  
yet this reality cant  it cant be it just cant be real
it doesnt feel real this falling
drowning feel .. me gasping for air cause i cant  breathe
i i i cant see the light anymore  its gone 
my first heartbreak

© 2017 BritishLotus

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Whoa, well explained and expressed poem you've written here. The lack of punctuation really adds to the emotion of the words. Tyfs!!!

Posted 11 Months Ago

Cyprian Van Dyke

11 Months Ago

No, I wasn't being funny. I simply meant that the lack of punctuation read like you were racing with.. read more

11 Months Ago

ok i see well i was a little emotional
Cyprian Van Dyke

11 Months Ago

Heartbreaks tend to be, I hear.
A first heartbreak can be tough indeed. But we live and learn and life goes on. We have to change our reality sometimes.

Posted 11 Months Ago

Heartbreaks can be real rough. And doesnt matter of ots your first or 4th it is always straining

Posted 11 Months Ago

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Added on October 7, 2017
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