my first heartbreak

looking up reaching my arms up i cant touch it

i cant grasp it , im falling faster and faster deeper

deeper into this darkness at the bottom of this world

i see the light fading  so fast too fast for me

this happened like a dream i was sleep i was sleep 

instead of living my reality i was living this dream

this dream where me and you are happy we are whole

but that was so long ago, rememeber  

yet this reality cant  it cant be it just cant be real

it doesnt feel real this falling

drowning feel .. me gasping for air cause i cant  breathe

i i i cant see the light anymore  its gone 

my first heartbreak

Reviews

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Whoa, well explained and expressed poem you've written here. The lack of punctuation really adds to the emotion of the words. Tyfs!!!

[BritishLotus]

are you trying to be funny i wasnt worried about puntaution and things just getting it o

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

No, I wasn't being funny. I simply meant that the lack of punctuation read like you were racing with your words, which many do when they're venting, which kind of makes it hard to understand the person, but you still pick up on the vibe. It seemed fitting the topic and all .

[BritishLotus]

ok i see well i was a little emotional

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Heartbreaks tend to be, I hear.

[Sami Khalil]

A first heartbreak can be tough indeed. But we live and learn and life goes on. We have to change our reality sometimes.

[Jackie]

Heartbreaks can be real rough. And doesnt matter of ots your first or 4th it is always straining