first can down

first can down

A Poem by Brittney Lea
"

to my mom

"
First can down
You're fine,
Everything is chill now,
Relaxing after work time

Second can down
You're feeling your self let go,
You're feeling easy now,
Nobody is telling you to stop so...

Forth can down
You're having fun
All your troubles are gone now,
You feel bright as the sun

Sixth can down
You're slurring your words,
You don't see that your child is scared
No because you are too busy,
Too busy having "fun"

Eight cans down
You ask her to get you another,
But she says no
"get your a*s in there and get me another one you piece of s**t."
She's scared of what you might do so she does what she is told

Tenth can down 
She says something wrong,
It could have been word,
But it doesn't matter,
You will still punish her

Eleventh can down 
There's blood on the floor,
You're knuckles hurt,
She's in the corner crying,
But you don't see anything wrong

Twelfth can down
You feel dizzy
She's still crying
You fall to the floor,
She's dying inside watching you

Thirteenth can down
You finally give, and fall one last time
She gets up from the corner and walks you to your room
She'll never tell anyone about this,
Nor will you remember

You're asleep now
She's in the living room cleaning,
All the cans, all the blood
She won't sleep tonight
She blames herself, just like the other times

She'll believe that she deserved this, 
She deserved the beating she got
She hates herself, she thinks you hate her too
Little do you know that this was the end

She grabs your gun from your closet,
she goes into her room and closes the door
She pulls the trigger with no hesitation
All that's left is a note

For you is all she wrote

© 2014 Brittney Lea


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Brittney Lea
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i love this, this is a really creative way of showing the affect of drinking, i respect and enjoy this alot, btw thanks for the chill things u said about my writing ^^ your stuff is way better than mine XD

Posted 9 Years Ago


This... wow. This is currently the frontrunner in the depressing poem contest

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Added on July 27, 2014
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Tags: alcoholism, alcohol, mom, drinking, suicide, for you, note

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Brittney Lea
Brittney Lea

Benton, AR



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