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This is my first attempt at slam poetry, and I'm excited to film a performance of this piece over the coming day.
Sleepover

Sleepover

A Chapter by Brittany DeFranco
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Tristan, Rose, Momo, Emmi, and Syn are friends, Rose & Tristan, Emmi & Syn being couples and this funny adventure is only just getting started ^_~

"

   (In Tristan's huge castle where he lives in the middle of the dark woods, but near a city, something dark was lurking in the shadows and trespassing into the castle where Tristan and his girlfriend Rose were sitting in his game room with Momo the small Neko.

   Tristan, a lightning/fire demon that had a muscular body type and had messy dirty blond hair with blue-green eyes and always wore large baggy shirts and shorts. He was funny, smart, and can sometimes be mean. Rose, a Lycan/dark angel had long wavy red hair and grey eyes with a slim body, she was sweet, beautiful, simple-minded. She wore a black corset shirt with a jacket with chains on it and dark blue jeans, also with chains. She can't remember her past before she was 10 years old. Momo was a neko, she had long black curly hair in pigtails and brown eyes. She was small, about 4'3" and she wore a mini black dress with long sleaves.)

 

Rose ~ Hi! Let's get started!! *hugs Momo after she shortly came in*

 

Tristan ~ yeah...*busy putting snacks on the coffee table, he had two more friends coming and there was a lot a food waiting for them*

 

Rose ~ OoO' okay, that's a lot of candy and chips and sodas....

 

Momo ~ YAY!! Snacks! *claps* do you have M&M's Tristan?

 

Tristan ~ *points to Rose*

 

Rose ~ *Smiling while eatting bags of M&M's and Lindor Truffles. She looks at Momo* Here you go! *throws huge bag of M&M's for Momo to catch*

 

Momo ~ *Misses the bag and it hits her head and falls on the floor* Opps! ^^' *picks the bag up* Sorry!

 

(Ding Dong!!)

 

Tristan ~ Nice. *goes and opens the door* Momo, your playtoy is here!

 

Momo ~ O_O' Huh?! What playtoy?! *waves arms in the air*

 

Zack ~ Yo! *comes in and Momo finds out he's a hired stripper and in a sexy fireman outfit*

 

Momo ~ Who did this and who can I send flowers to? *gazes at the man's sexy body*

 

Tristan ~ Brought the "stuff"? *smirks*

 

Zack ~ yep *Smirks evilly back*

 

Rose ~ ....*looks up at Tristan* What stuff?!

 

Tristan ~ *Calm* Condoms

 

Momo ~ W-what?! *waves arms and looks at Rose helplessly*

 

(Tristan and Zack laughs at the girls)

 

Tristan ~ We're joking, we'll have sex later ^_^

 

Rose ~ ....Fine, but no four-some!

 

Zack ~ Here's the "stuff" *throws some video games at Tristan and he catches them smirking in victory of fooling the girls.*

 

Tristan ~ *puts video games next to 360* By the way, Zack's just a friend.

 

Zack ~ Hi. ^-^

 

Rose & Momo ~ -_-' what the f**k....

 

Momo ~ *sighs* um, so no sex?

 

Zack ~ *Sees Momo whispering to Rose and smirks* Hey! What are you two talking about?

 

Momo ~ *jumps a little* Nothing! *looks at floor while tail sways back and forth nervously*

 

Rose ~ *whispers* nah, I'm sure it was just a joke.

 

Tristan ~ *appears behind Rose and starts to tickle her and she bursts out laughing* What was that?

 

Rose ~ N-NOTHING!! Stop! *Wresling Tristan to tickle him, but fails and ends up on the floor with Tristan on top still tickling her*

 

Tristan ~ Don't even try.

 

Rose ~ C-can't b-breathe!

 

Tristan ~ *Stops tickling and kisses her lightly* Okay. *Picks her up and places her on couch* I'll set the games up now. *Goes back to 360 and starts setting up game.*

 

Momo ~ Um....*looks at Zack*

 

Zack ~ *Starts to look at Momo*

 

Momo ~ *Looks away still blushing from prank*

 

Zack ~ *Smirks and walks over to Momo from behind.*

 

Rose ~ *Eats Lindor truffles* and you didn't help me why? *Watching Tristan set up games not notcing Zack walking towards Momo.*

 

Momo ~ *meows loudy*

 

Rose & Tristan ~ *looks over at Momo*

 

Zack ~ *Standing behind Momo with his hands on her sides* It looked like fun to tickle her *grins* watch. *squeeses Momo's sides*

 

Momo ~ *Meows loudly once again and blushes as she runs under the bed in her cat form*

 

Rose & Tristan ~ *laughs*

 

Tristan ~ okay the games are set up.

 

Rose ~ yeah...so are mine. *smirks*

 

Tristan ~ *glares playfully at Rose as she giggles* what game?

 

Rose ~ ....That's for me to know and for you to find out! *Smiles innocently*

 

Tristan ~ *Starts to walk over to tickle Rose as the door bell rings* ugh, I'll get it. They're late! *Walks over to door, but it swings open with a slam in Tristan's face* F**k! *Holds face with one of his hands as he catches his balance*

 

Emmi ~ *Comes through door with Syn* Hey! What's up?!

 

Syn ~ uhh...You hit someone *Points to Tristan behind the door cursing at himself*

 

Emmi ~ ...sorry?

 

Tristan ~ Shut up....

 

Momo ~ No you shut up!

 

Rose ~ (She ate too much sugar again....) -_-'

 

Tristan ~ What was that?! *Glares at Momo*

 

Momo ~ I said sh--!

 

Tristan ~ *Grabs Momo by the throat* That's it.

 

Rose ~ No! Stop, don't hurt her!

 

Tristan ~ I'll be back. *Leaves with Momo in fist carring her through a door that leads through a long dark hallway*

 

Momo ~ Help!! *Her screams are heard down the hallway until there was complete silence*

 

Everyone ~ O.O'




© 2010 Brittany DeFranco



Author's Note

Brittany DeFranco
Hope you liked it, please review so I can write more!!!

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Ooh, this was amazing! It made me pick up a play I started to write a while ago and dropped because it was uninteresting. Now i'm determined! I loved the twists and turns. The condoms made me laugh because of a past experience, but no one wants to hear about that... ;)
Couple things real quick, though (my intentions are good, i swear!)
1) Good job describing the characters! I can picture them well! I'm not a big reader of plays, but maybe give an overview of the characters' personalities? I'm more of a novel reader, so pay no attention to that suggestion :) I know in movies you learn the characters through dialogue as the play goes on. Scratch this comment completely then! :D
2) In plays, they have commands and not facial expressions like "O_O, O.O'" etc. written in text. Since this is for fun, it gives a better idea on the person's facial expression than words like "aghast" and "shocked," etc.. Reading this reminded me so much of my best friend that it's ridiculous :) She likes a lot of emotes... lol (just like me, as you can tell by all of the smiley faces!)
3) I saw some minor spelling errors here and there, like "carring" instead of "carrying" but i'm just a grammar nazi (nickname given by that BFF :p)
FANTASTIC job otherwise! I really want to read the rest of it :) Write on, sistah!
-Kantola

P.S. Let me know if this isnt the type of criticism you're looking for :o i dont want to sound or portray myself as mean or picky, it's just an automatic thing haha.

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on February 18, 2010
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Tags: party, sleepover, love, friends, neko, lycan, vampire, demon, castle, couples, perverted, sexy


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Brittany DeFranco
Brittany DeFranco

Brandywine, MD



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Hey, I'm Brittany DeFranco and I'm a writer of course. I'm trying to write some stories and hopefully have them published. I write Fantasy, Romance with Action included. I'm always up for a great st.. more..

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