The ocean of love

Deeper as we go we pass one another,
But not too far, our hands collide,
Knowing we always have eachother,
We are following this tide.

Keep on going,
our love is showing,
I see a reflection
No distraction.
We never ever will fall apart,
I dont wanna depart.

This ocean, this love potion.
Keep me flowing,
Just us,
We will always keep on going.

Ill swim this ocean for you.
Full of blue.
Your so true.
Marrying you isnt an option,
I will say yes,
With you looking your best.

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

This is a nice poem. I love the emotions simply put and effective in instilling the core message of the poem.
However, you need to be aware of your punctuation and grammar; this is very important for us writers.
But if you have your own reasons for writing the way you do and feel, then that's fine.
Moreover, we are here to learn from each other and help each grow as writers.

In the third line of the first stanza (paragraph),
you need to separate 'eachother' to 'each other'.

In the second stanza, put a comma (,) after
'I see a reflection'.

In the third stanza, your sentence seems fragmented, choppy. It should be like this:
'This ocean, this love potion, keep me flowing;
just us, we will always keep going.'

In the fourth stanza, an apostrophe's missing in
'Ill swim this ocean for you'. Say, 'I'll swim this ocean for you'.
Within that same paragraph, I'm sure you meant,
'You're so true.', and 'marrying you isn't an option'.
Notice the apostrophe in 'you're' and 'isn't'.

'Marrying you isn't an option' is a complete sentence on its own, and, therefore, should have a full stop.

WELL DONE!
NICE POEM!

[Let her tell you]

thank you so much for taking the time to read my writing and leave a comment! it really helps when you hear other people's feedback. I know I am a little sloppy. Thank you so much!!!