Grayscale Heart

Grayscale Heart

A Poem by Asante.

Pianos and strings
paint reveries
of which the poet
may not know how--

expression in a pen
akin to a well,
dried and deprived,

I'm a man
of manic calms and anxieties,
mannerisms curved in cursive
to enhance the cuss words
carved in,

accursed and I am blessed;
I'm wonderful
and a plague;
I am so immersed in gray
that I know of no other way,

lacking vision for a
sun that shines:
I don't see it yet,

clouds, they break away for spacious light
that I've yet to embrace;
colorless,
but under the wonder
is winter in effect..

© 2016 Asante.



Author's Note

Asante.
My melon meets My melanin meets My melancholy.

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Great! And you deserve the ! I usually stay away from using because it's so shouting at people. Like firing bullets at them only by punctuation. But this is a write I chose to read again and suddenly felt overwhelmed by its expressions and the images it evokes. A very smartly and very creative, original poem. Your lines are astoundingly on point yet keep the vagueness of the gray you veil your words in. It's an art and a challenge to choose just the right words to create the perfect mood and coloring which then, to my mind, is to hover over and drip from one's words to make a good write. I had the image of an artist in mind, philosophic, excentric and studded with self-reflection in a room of nothing but gray walls that come down like gray liquids as in waves, make them sink in until one becomes engrossed in this mindset, the foundation or heart of creation.
I abs love the lines: I'm wonderful
and a plague;
I am so immersed in gray", those are so achingly good.
I love this piece, this is going to be saved among my favorites. xo

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante.

3 Weeks Ago

"I usually stay away from using because it's so shouting at people. Like firing bullets at them only.. read more
Βανέσα

3 Weeks Ago

First a small thanks, second a bigger thank you than the first one for sharing what was on your mind.. read more



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mannerisms curved in cursive... such a beautiful play on words ... i was truly drawn in.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante.

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you. I'm glad to know that this had you engaged. :)
Great! And you deserve the ! I usually stay away from using because it's so shouting at people. Like firing bullets at them only by punctuation. But this is a write I chose to read again and suddenly felt overwhelmed by its expressions and the images it evokes. A very smartly and very creative, original poem. Your lines are astoundingly on point yet keep the vagueness of the gray you veil your words in. It's an art and a challenge to choose just the right words to create the perfect mood and coloring which then, to my mind, is to hover over and drip from one's words to make a good write. I had the image of an artist in mind, philosophic, excentric and studded with self-reflection in a room of nothing but gray walls that come down like gray liquids as in waves, make them sink in until one becomes engrossed in this mindset, the foundation or heart of creation.
I abs love the lines: I'm wonderful
and a plague;
I am so immersed in gray", those are so achingly good.
I love this piece, this is going to be saved among my favorites. xo

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante.

3 Weeks Ago

"I usually stay away from using because it's so shouting at people. Like firing bullets at them only.. read more
Βανέσα

3 Weeks Ago

First a small thanks, second a bigger thank you than the first one for sharing what was on your mind.. read more
Sante, your melon seems to have a split personality. Sort of a Jekyll and Hyde effect going on. I like the contrasts, since most of us are not one-dimensional. I would like to see your 'manic calms' which I'm sure must be something. Good write.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante.

1 Month Ago

Ah! Great job catching the dueling natures, Ted. That quality in itself makes us human, I tried to c.. read more
This is an impressive and deep write, Sante !
Very nice imagery..Like a two different sides of a same coin..there is so much to know about ourselves..
You have a very unique style of writing that catches readers attention...that last stanza hits you deep and is my favorite one.
You have painted your thought beautifully through words :-)
Keep up the good work.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante.

1 Month Ago

I apologize for the late response!

Your words are flattering. :) I do my best. Thank .. read more
I did read it, just never reviewed! So I thought I would now :)
I love this piece.
"mannerisms curved in cursive" -definitely my favourite line. It just flows so well and the lines following are flawless.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece again :)


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante.

2 Months Ago

Thank you, Riley! I'm glad you got into this the way that you did.
Grayscale indeed but your words however melancholy are actually quite vivid and ironically have a colourful energy and hum. There is creative spark in every hue. Fine writing Sante.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante.

3 Months Ago

The kindest words that also sit so genuinely. Many thanks, Starzy!
"accursed and I am blessed;
I'm wonderful
and a plague;
I am so immersed in gray
that I know of no other way,"
This is so heart-touching! ^-^

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante.

3 Months Ago

That was the goal! Thank you, friend. :)
YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Hah well goal achieved😉
You are welcome ☺
This feels like uninspired living, sort of going through the motions. Waiting on something to happen that will turn your black and white days into vibrant ones.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante.

4 Months Ago

Wonderfully worded. I like to think that we live our lives in hues -- it sucks having to live out di.. read more
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4 Months Ago

My pleasure Sante!
Man lol..I see all these wonderful and lyrically written reviews. But when it comes to your work I just have to say "Holy S**t That's Good!"

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante.

4 Months Ago

S**t; that's as straightforward and raw as it should get sometimes! I appreciate that, bro.

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Tags: honesty, winter, poetry, acceptance, heart, introspection

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