The Painted Face

I am somebody,

Somebody that is influence by what I see,

What you do I do,

Everything you do rubs off on me.

You made me the way I am.

If you say I'm a brat, the same goes for you.

Say I'm a jerk... Well, you get it.

We are not that different,

You and I.

We share similarities in our personalities.

The same molded heart,

The same thoughts and feelings.

You created me,

Painted me.

You painted this face on me,

And then, somehow, the paint started to layer,

The several feelings and attitudes, 

continued to grow and crust on my skin.

I changed constantly and so did you.

Now, you push me away,

Leaving me with this terrible painted face that you created.

Author's Note

Did not come out the way I hoped but I hope you still liked it! I am not that great at poems so you can probably tell by looking at this... Anyways, review please. I hope you enjoyed it! (Did you understand the meaning of this write?)

Reviews

[amdc101]

I loved this poem! Don't say you're not that great at poems...you can always improve but I like it a lot anyway. If I understood the meaning of this correctly, it is about someone making someone else be like them, then leaves that other person on their own, not knowing who they are. Let me know! Great write.

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Such a truthful write, I feel sadness in this write, but yet expressed so well.

[Tate Morgan]

I loved the analogy of a face painted by life and its experience.I look in the ,mirror sometimes and say where is that young ma who use look back at me with daring and venture?

[....]

such apowerful read, I like this, it speaks of truth....xo

[LadyNaida]

This is deep. The funny thing is that sometimes we hide behind the painted face because we do not want anyone to see the pain.

[Hinoglue]

Wow, this is really powerful! Very well written, the flow is amazing, I love it!

[Kathryn]

(Just before I get into the thick of my review, I definately got the meaning, and you are not bad at poems at all :) )
The simple structure worked really well for this piece, so well done. It's a great starting point if you're uncertain about how to begin a poem. The meaning was fantastic - I can really relate to it. I know what it's like to be influenced by people until you become someone else - a painted face, if you like - that can barely remember what lies underneath those layers. The imagery, expecially in the last line, was fabulous, if a little eerie, and the language that you used was perfect, even if it did lacksome of the fancy features that people try to include all the time. I was encaptivated through the whole piece, and the overall effect was fabulous. Well done :)

[Daytonight]

Very well done! From all that I have read your poems are just as great as your stories. Well done.

[deeps]

This is a wonderful poem, I enjoyed this.
I understand this write.

[Black]

i like it :)
the emotions are there :)
way to go :)
It is like you
and the one you pretend to be
like the unconcious you, who is fair, and has true emotions
and the concious you that acts but doesnt feel,
Or something like that
Lol lol, or im just talking nonsens