Did not come out the way I hoped but I hope you still liked it! I am not that great at poems so you can probably tell by looking at this... Anyways, review please. I hope you enjoyed it! (Did you understand the meaning of this write?)
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I loved this poem! Don't say you're not that great at poems...you can always improve but I like it a lot anyway. If I understood the meaning of this correctly, it is about someone making someone else be like them, then leaves that other person on their own, not knowing who they are. Let me know! Great write.
I loved the analogy of a face painted by life and its experience.I look in the ,mirror sometimes and say where is that young ma who use look back at me with daring and venture?
(Just before I get into the thick of my review, I definately got the meaning, and you are not bad at poems at all :) )
The simple structure worked really well for this piece, so well done. It's a great starting point if you're uncertain about how to begin a poem. The meaning was fantastic - I can really relate to it. I know what it's like to be influenced by people until you become someone else - a painted face, if you like - that can barely remember what lies underneath those layers. The imagery, expecially in the last line, was fabulous, if a little eerie, and the language that you used was perfect, even if it did lacksome of the fancy features that people try to include all the time. I was encaptivated through the whole piece, and the overall effect was fabulous. Well done :)
i like it :)
the emotions are there :)
way to go :)
It is like you
and the one you pretend to be
like the unconcious you, who is fair, and has true emotions
and the concious you that acts but doesnt feel,
Or something like that
Lol lol, or im just talking nonsens
My name is Brynna Wynne Wiley. Aka: BrynnaW. I'm supposed to tell all about myself right here but... I've done that before.
Now, it's just about the writing. more..