Whisper In Your Ear

Let me whisper in your ear,

Tell me what you hear,

Is it calling?

Or are you falling?

Is death coming near?

Or is it me that you fear?

You will not see tomorrow,

It is your life, I will borrow,

I'll take you now,

You should take a bow.

This is your last stand,

And I don't want the ending to be bland.

Author's Note

Hope you loved it!

Reviews

[ivizarx]

sorry to say but if I was a psychiatrist I would infer that the inspiration of this poem was taken from that of a pedophile or deeply disturbed emotionally confused killer of small animals, thus where the element of creepiness comes from... certainly a great monologue and well done in character. the rhyme scheme however is a bit basic but it fits very so. the only thing I recommend is if you're going to take the approach of writing with a rhyme scheme in mind, go for more structural poetry, in other words research more other forms of poetry like: Triolets, Rimas, Rondels, etc.
look on shadowpoetry.com for more research in the topic at hand.
with no structure in mind though, and if it is your wish to keep it that way, I suggest in going for a more free verse or spoken word approach.

[Tate Morgan]

Well I hope the reaper has a sense of humor I think its pretty obvious god does

[Seshat Nidaba]

You write 5 hours a day? I wish I had your literary motivation.

For forced rhyme, this was a heck pretty good!

[STAR CHILD]

good job it made me smile

[Daytonight]

This one gave me chills! Well done.

[LadyNaida]

Have to agree it is creepy.

[Jupiter Jazz]

Coooollll... that was eeiry and creepy and all that good stuff

[Black]

well it wasnt creepy, or dark,
it was just, not ordinary..
lol.. sometimes people need to feel like they are in control,
and some do it at work, some do it at home, some do it at sports, and some are bullied or being yelled at, and wonder what wll happen, if you were the one they fear or etc etc..
maybe im totally off..
but it is a nice write

[amdc101]

That was a bit dark and scary...which makes it interesting. Painted an image in my head. Well done. :)

[TheElfPrincess]

That was kind of creepy, in a good way. I like the rhyme. There are barely poems that rhyme nowadays. I loved this, well done.