Biting Back

I have no doubt the picture will be deleted! A rant at how I am sometimes made to feel......maybe I should have been born a man!

They call me antisocial because..............

I won't dribble random words or appease

Gurgle over lipsticks,or perfect size six 6 feet

Compare my wandering hips, or delicately sneeze

Gossip about poor Cheryl, fantasise about Beckham

Or swap stories of some poor divorced woman,

Coo over hanger upon hanger of shapeless oddments

Or spend endless consuming hours in dress rehearsal

Admiring my plastic beauty before a mirror

Or become Miss oh so clever text queen,

Grant a kiss that never quite reaches the cheeks

Or quash mounds of flesh into a bra to become Pamela Anderson

Scoff at the less well off pretending to be a good Samaritan

No, I won't

Bend over

Tuck it in

Thrust it out

Stretch the skin

Giggle gliding on heels

File my nails

Perfect the cute dimple

Pick the invisible pimple

Become someone's mannequin

And bath in products not oh so Simple

No I won't

I shall dig in

Go out on a limb

Stay out of the gym

Discipline?

What's wrong with plain old genuine......

I might be a little unfinished

Oh no, don't rub it in

My tatty ways, my curious shop

My bitten nails, my unruly crop

My impatience, my ignorance

But there was no down payment

For my mighty feisty frame

I just don't want to play their game

They call me antisocial

But I'm no one's mannequin

Reviews

[Clockwork]

Society has a warped view of beauty. Unfortunately the definition of beauty seems to now stem from tabloids and corporations. With all of that I wonder if there are other that would agree and challenge the standards that have been made. Those standards can not lost forever. There should not be only one definition of beauty, and that should not come from one source. Beauty also should not make people hurt or feel inferior.

[Ian H Morrison]

yes powerful right into the point very strong showing tthe reader that the author is a strong independant woman

[Mark]

Got turned on to this piece from Sam D's page, and am I ever glad I did! Bubo, we used to talk a lot, and I don't know what happened, but reading this makes me sorry to have missed so much for so long. I will send you a piece of mine (you may already have reviewed it) saying in blog-form-prose what you just so exquisitely said in verse. And may I consider re-upping our friend status?

[Pax]

i feel what you feel..brilliant to put it in words.

the ending was fantastic:
They call me antisocial
But I'm no one's mannequin

well done...

[Alicia Schroeder]

To many people assume that changing there appearance will make them a better person.. In reality, true beauty comes from within.. Amazing write.. :)

[cartera]

An excellent poem. Makes a change to read something that is not only good verse but political with it.
Smashing and should be published in The Sun.
ATB
Alex.

[p.kuhl]

holy s**t. this is wonderful. i'm shelving this! thank you bubo

[Haz]

Or become Miss oh so clever text queen,

Grant a kiss that never quite reaches the cheeks.

You didn't just rant, your lines are really clever, this will resonate with a lot of people. Kudos :)

[Raef C. Boylan]

So many really good lines here, where you play with semantics
e.g. "And bath in products not oh so Simple".

The blocks of end-rhymes carry the flow well by speeding it up in a song-like fashion:
"I shall dig in
Go out on a limb
Stay out of the gym
Discipline?
What's wrong with plain old genuine......" - and the direct/rhetorical questions here make it conversational, engaging the reader.

Some of the points you make are even more important and original social commentary than saying you refuse to follow fashion/trends, like:
"I won't dribble random words or appease"
"Scoff at the less well off pretending to be a good Samaritan" - the way it's all tied in reminds people that there are multiple ways to be false and shallow.
Overall, nice work.

p.s.
"And bath in products not oh so Simple" (just checking, bath = bathe? Just 'cos it sounds more 'pampering self', 'luxury' etc)

[newyearnorma]

wow i love this! i feel this same way. our society pays to much attention to whats on the outside

[the_stoic]

amazing rendition is all i can say .. "I'm no one's mannequin" is like a newly found phrase that i am going to use quite often whenever i am caught in a similar situation ! thank you for sharing :)