Reconciliation

Looking for her...............

 

 

 

Hello………
Child in light
I think I see you
Just grasping edge of my mind,
Where should I reach you
Skin burns bleakly cold,
Eyes clutch no ray of hope
Trespass, little light steps,
As you dissolve, decompose,
Falling on bleeding feet
Through chasms chained in sorrow,
Whipped into frenzy by those
Who standby suffocating you,
Claiming all the while, sighing
Words of love, just too much,
As they lay you down to
Pick pieces off your bones,
Slack in vacant promises
Of priceless treasures to come.
Untruths, ending of days
Binding of lurid night
Hollow stars, almighty flight,
Starved of beauty, deserted smile.

I think I see you.

Hello?

 

Gaiety, joker who rocks
In decibels, syllables, giggles,
Frowns at sorrow of lost youth,
Rockets you to hiding moon,
Glows not in warmth
For that would be the sun
Soaking rain, purifying dead skin
To float in sea of debris,
While rainbow fragments
Dreams of gold endings,
Brittle pots remain soberly empty.
Alice chases white rabbit still,
Queen of hearts roars disapproval
Under hasty clouds scattered,
Escaping dark stormy skies.

 

I was with you

 

 

Stay

Girl child
Let me warm fractured skin,
Fold you into my dreams
Rest a while, hush child,
Don’t go just yet
Don’t fret
Shush,
We have so much to talk about
How long has it been?
Since we shared a smile
Come girl child,
Let me dry your eyes
Tend your exposed skin,
Show you all the places I have been,
Lie upon me as we share dreams
I know you
As you know me
You’re my child within.

 

 

Reviews

[Linda Crawford Ortiz]

This is in answer to your question to me: "How do you do that?" Write a paliddromic piece. You're only a word or two away from perfection in that area...It's not really something that can be planned. It's more something with a perfect format and pace of a particular piece...and you've captured it here. The "Girl child" in this piece is an excellent reference to what we seek, ourself at a different time, in a different place. "You''re my child within/as you know me/I know you"...so passionate a personal address. They say that in order to write well, we need to write about what it is we are most familiar...you've accomplished that quite well right here. That deserves more congratulations and "decibles, syllables, and giggles" than anything else...this recognition of self and one's own inner child. Great write!

[Being.john.sweet~The Ev..]

what a fractured write as you said, emits the turmoil within, jutting out and jagged line by line, thank you~John

[Susan M. Fenn]

Frowns at sorrow of lost youth,
Rockets you to hiding moon,
Glows not in warmth
For that would be the sun
Soaking rain, purifying dead skin
To float in sea of debris,
While rainbow fragments
Dreams of gold endings,
Brittle pots remain soberly empty.
Alice chases white rabbit still,
Queen of hearts roars disapproval

Those are my favorite lines.. girl child.. oh my. You have inspired me to find my own, and maybe give her some much needed comfort. This is a brilliant piece, thank you so much for sharing. You can always move me. Thank you again.

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

Bubo this an amazing piece, Just Inspired. It is perfect and I wouldn't change a single word. I think the word I'm looking for is Phenomenal, absolutely phenomenal. But I would make the i's Capitol.
Debby

[M J Moore]

Show you all the places I have been,
Lie upon me as we share dreams
I know you
As you know me
Youre my child within.

What a time when the child you once were meets the woman you are today. You sit back and wonder, what would she think of you? Would she approve? Are you what she wanted to be? And if you could, would you go back there, or would you still be the one you are now?

Wonderful piece here. So deep and moving.

mj

[Ashly Christen]

I know you
As you know me
Youre my child within.....


i love this
amazing
i love it love it love it!
i wouldnt change a thing
i could feel every word and almost reach her hand
it was beautiful
sometimes she is visible when you look in the mirror
shes always waiting for someone to hold her
but afraid to let you close
she has been hurt and bruised
her heart melts
such an innocent soul
thrust into a world of evil
constantly just trying to find her way home

[J. Hampton]

ahhh....to reconcile with that inner child
a must do....to maintain sanity.
my Husband said ....." you play too much" ....the other day...I said " well perhaps ya should've married a grownup then!!! "
Enjoy and maintain that woman child....it is our joy and giggle-keeper.

( this is so well done)

"Fold you into my dreams
Rest a while, hush child,
Dont go just yet
Dont fret
Shush,
We have so much to talk about "

Yet another great write !!!

Blessssssssss

[Sianna Reader]

Wow Bubo, you always out do your potential! I always enjoy your poems. xxxx :D

[Lucky Me]

this was nice. it was obvious you were speaking of your inner child before the ending was reached, but it's a nice assurance for an ending. I liked the alice in wonderland stanza. it made me feel like I was floating around in some other world. You did a really good job with this one.

[Sandra V.]

wow...you trully have a gift

[Gary H]

Lost for words. After reading this I don't think I should write again - stop cheering - I might reconsider. I don't often read other reviews first but find I have to as this is so good I have a complete mental block. Oh, I just agree with everyone else. Superb and really well done xx.