Tangled Inside a Monster

Ever feel trapped by pain?

 

Oh yes baby
Let me slip away
Running rivers over harsh mountains
Sliding graciously by,
Leaves gathered dancing
Tossed together eagerly
In new refreshing breeze

          Without you

Dreaming of days I floated
Upon a fantasy of candy pink
Seamless in its entirety,
Beautiful in shapes we fit.
Dear love words whispered
In grass of new dawn arising,
Salty sea swam with legs entwined

          Breathing

Air shared
Breathing life into me
In brightest of moonlit skies
Making love
Until I was blind to all
But the calling of you.

Simply days without you
Let me clean myself
Slip away just far enough
Safe from your arms harbouring

          Nothing

But air we shared
As I fucked you hard

          Vindicated

Delved deep down
Into silly sorry heart,
I suddenly woke
Tangled inside a monster
Of Goliath power
Slipping into me
Kneading bones tenderly.

     Dirty heart

Into the sin bin you go
Remain alone
Cover all misdeeds
Scan past events

          Decipher

Tell a few lies,
Bend willow me swaying
In symphony to tunes sung

You cannot break me
So stop trying.

Let me slip away
Free to blossom
Love the woman in me
For life goes on for eternity

Without you          

Reviews

[David P. Eckert]

Where we find ourselves when and if we let go is sometimes not where we wish to be, not sexually, not romantically, not otherwise. We sometimes let the winds carry us, leaving us vulnerable to change as the winds, but in the end, we want to be our own selves.

David

[Jillian Ashe]

Wow, this is really powerful. I like how you realized something waas a mistake and fixed it. Great descriptions!

[Charlotte Marie]

Great piece.. Your flow is amazing and your use of imagery is above all the some of the best I've seen.. thanks for sharing..

[Sweet Addictions Is Stu..]

Heartbreaking, Strong , Breathtaking These are the words that come to mind. I absolutely loved it.
-S.A.

[Kelley Frost]

The strength in this moves you like no other. Your going to be ok is wrote all over this.
Great write Bubo! Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost

[Chris Zahar]

This is an experience that so many of us have dealt with - being blinded by what you think is love only to realize that you're with a monster that's slowly breaking you into empty shell of a f**k slave (and don't think it only happens to women, either), and then finally breaking free, looking back, and realizing what an idiot you were. I especially loved the "as I fucked you hard" line because it's so unexpected. The reader is just calmly floating along on a delicate, bitter sweet tale of failed romance and then WHAM!!!, - they're smacked in the face with an F-bomb. It provides such a nice contrast, and emotional complexity. It's almost as if you're trying to hold back your emotions for the delicacy of the poem, but then that "f**k" just breaks right through. I love your work, Bubo.

[Chad Dougless]

Hey Bubo, it has been a while since I have been on here to read your work. Nice to see that you have been keeping busy with your writing and continue to do so very, very well. Great job with the cycle of feelings here, a feeling of completeness in an incomplete system. Hope you are doing well.

[Lucky Me]

I like the different levels of this. You made every point so intense. From falling for him, loving him, needing him then not needing him. It's hard to have this many emotions all rolled into one poem and have the reader understand each emotion so well. You had fun alliteration in this one. It made the poem roll off the tounge so much easier. Oh and I'm sorry I've been so behind on reviewing. Been busy lately.
Anyway the end was my favorite. Sure I like being in love and feeling that intenseness, who doesn't, but it is so much more empowering feeling strong in being alone; this is what I felt in the end. I felt you had come to terms with the loss, that it happened for all it's own reasons and that was that. This person could have you, need you, want you, but could never hold you down. Their memory will never hold you down.

[Erotic Goddess]

You cannot break me, so stop trying.

YES! That is the statement that needed to be said. You are getting there my friend. Climbing out of the hole that you had fallen in. You are getting stronger, your poems are getting stronger, and DAMN girl, I envy you your audience. People love to read your work, myself included. Keep writing my friend.

XXOXX

[Crystal L. Test]

Well, I see there is a mixed vote on the F word being used. Let me just say this, there is a difference between making love and f**king so if you meant it then I say use it. It is a jolting word and I did think it stood out but maybe that was what you wanted. There is power, strength and hope in this but this is also still anger. That's a good thing. It can be a driving force to make us move on. Sounds like you are. Keep up the good work.

Thanks for sharing. :)