Behind Green Eyes

 

 

I have whispered to spirits
Those little light treads
Marking my aging heart
They stare, I imagine
A desolate blank expression

Behind green eyes
          Lies a different person

So let me introduce myself again

I don’t know what you did to me
But I’m not the same.
Faces pass me, smiles of many men
Noise of continuous life disturbs,
Summer hammering with intent.

Songs resound in enormity
As brain cells scatter to corners
Tearfully begging forgetfulness
Enwrapping tears inside

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     A
     L
     L
     I
     N
     G

Watering pumping heart
Still bleeding from scars
Of a past laced with sadness
At mankind I disguised myself from.
Hidden.
Yet forever relying upon

          To do the right thing.

I don’t know what you did to me
But I’m not the same.
I return to old beginnings
Tasteless in repetition
Tenaciously stealing strength,
I fought so hard to get here today
Yet I am fatally changed
Counting those betrayal essays
Eternal in their morbid death.

Behind green eyes
          Lies a different person

So let me introduce myself again


© 2007 Bubo

Reviews

[Touché Armada]

Bubo, I have the most tiny little to say.... This really brought tears. I cant even put words to it, not really......... a loss to a point that requires a whole new being.I know how that hurts, to walk away and try and rebuild, it reminds me of fish hooks and drowning and days in hospital,,,,,,,,,, until finally your dead, in a sense its death. Then the rebirth (not some born again) but an absence to the point your not who you used to be,Then comes the re introduction,,,, because nothing can ever be the same. Ok I've been drinking tonight, way to highly emotional, oh well. sorry.Beautiful as you are, your work reflects as always.Funny a couple of days ago someone told me I have beautiful eyes the sun was setting, I thought they were blue, in that light they were green, really it makes no difference to me. I mean who cares. Really. I still reintroduce myself also,,,, mainly because, I dont think many people know me well at all.Hugs Bubolicious =) You poetical princess..... As I go green lolololol

[Jillian Ashe]

Wow, this poem was really an eye opener. I loved it, so descriptive and innovative. You always do such a great job!

[Six Impossible Things]

every once in a while I feel like a poem was written for me. Selfish, I know. But I feel like there are some poems that I am meant to read... and this is one of them.

I'm behind green eyes as well and I couldn't keep myself from nodding my head 'yes' while reading
'I dont know what you did to me
But Im not the same.
Faces pass me, smiles of many men
Noise of continuous life disturbs,
Summer hammering with intent.'

The ending hits hard as well. Full of strength and hope. Great piece. I really must read more of your work!

[Sweet Addictions Is Stu..]

I love this! Truly brilliant piece. I think its all been said so Ill just say it again. WONDERFUL job!-S.A.

[Doug]

this is good. i like the repetition. it drives your point home. whoever this person was, it is clear that they changed you. great conveyance of thoughts. thanks.

[Annelise]

This is a truly amazing poem. There is so much more of the story here, but what you wrote fills us in just enough to see the change in this women, the despair, the hurt, the giving up. This is really amazing.

"I dont know what you did to me
But Im not the same.
Faces pass me, smiles of many men
Noise of continuous life disturbs,
Summer hammering with intent."

This is really amazing. The way you worded this stanza is great.

[Niya Moon]

I don't know what to say to this but it is beautiful thank you for sharing

P.S. sorry i haven't been around for a while I will look at the other things you sent me latter. thanks

[Jon]

Phenomenal.

Such a big journey to take in order to find new strength. On some levels things like this never go away, and that is where the strength and resolve to just get on with it anyway comes in. This was beautifully written and choc full of very very good lines.

"I dont know what you did to me
But Im not the same.
Faces pass me, smiles of many men
Noise of continuous life disturbs,
Summer hammering with intent.

Songs resound in enormity
As brain cells scatter to corners
Tearfully begging forgetfulness
Enwrapping tears inside"

I have tried to capture this so many times but have never come close to doing it like this. The feeling that life around is continuing whilst you are totally numb on the inside, trying to keep it together on the outside, but with "brain cells scattering to corners . . . . begging forgetfulness" - awesome.

"Watering pumping heart
Still bleeding from scars
Of a past laced with sadness
At mankind I disguised myself from.
Hidden.
Yet forever relying upon

To do the right thing. "

Another really astute observation about how hard it is to do what you know is right at a time when the very "organ"/emotions/rationale that you would normally use is on its knees - and things become so much more difficult.

But this is where the strength comes in.

"Tenaciously stealing strength,
I fought so hard to get here today
Yet I am fatally changed "

Digging deep and finding how strong you can really be. The downside of which is that you WILL never be the same. Sadly, in many cases, this is a good thing - because in the world we live in, those who can't find that strength can fall by the wayside.

Favourite!

[Kelley Frost]

I know were moving on right, and were not talking about the same person right? Your a good person Bubo and you have so much going on for you in your life. I really liked this and it showed lots of hope in it. Keep your chin up kido God has a plan for everyone. Gtrat write and thanks for sharing.kelley Frost

[Awriterofthetimeswhosee..]

This is really strong, great imagery, not sure about the title though, perhaps there's a strong element of the poem that you can illuminate...I love the line, "tasteless in repetition" and "A place laced with sadness". Well done.

Aaron

[Amplexus Dryke]

Fantastic.The falling part was cool. Original. Loved it.