Never Been In Love

Sometimes people that say that they've never been in love don't realize that it may not be that they didn't meet the one but rather they didn't allow themselves to let love in...

 

 

I frowned as her ego laid it down

"In love I've never been

I'm alone but happy and I try to love but then

there's always issues, excuses, and lies

as if a factory's been spitting out these guys

I've dated and as of late it's

been married, divorced, or separated. Of course,

I've tried to make 'KINDA' work

I've met 'SORTA' and decided to flirt

spent time with 'MAYBE' and found a jerk.

I just can't seem to find that SOME KINDA that's mine"

 

after a while the rhetoric made us both sick

yet as she ran it down I loosened my frown

and saw through frustration to the pain

past the cycle of loss to the aches of her brain

and as those confused grains became my...

became mine I pierced fear to find

a whispering plea that desperately said,

 

SEE ME!!..but don't feel me

FEEL ME!!..but don't smother me

SPOIL ME!!..but don't baby me

BABY ME!!..but don't change me

CHANGE WITH ME!!..but don't force me

 

and as her story grew she could tell that I knew

her eyes shook in pools of relief not grief

and I replaced her frustrated veil that she donned to start her tale

and replied

"It is what it is, girl. It'll happen when it AND you are complete AND true..."

Reviews

[Kathryn]

Finally, Talent! Best piece I have read all day. Really well done. The rhyme scheme was subtle and effective; sensitivity towards the subject; beautiful outlook.
I felt like you really know women. Well written, enjoyable, unique.
Thank you for sharing. Keep writing and inspiring.
Take care,
KateMeetWorld

[Li Li]

SEE ME!!..but don't feel me

FEEL ME!!..but don't smother me

SPOIL ME!!..but don't baby me

BABY ME!!..but don't change me

CHANGE WITH ME!!..but don't force me

What type of man are you.... really? You understand a woman? WOW!!!! I'm beyond impressed! Lol

There's such a sensitivity level when it comes to love and relationships. I feel as though a person will create reasons it shouldn't work...reasons why they shouldn't be loved. I feel as if these people just haven't found that ONE that makes the analyzing disappear.

You are really in touch with emotions... you seem to control them rather well. That's quite a gift. Especially when you don't only feel them.. but you can capture them in words.

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

I love your flow and knack for storytelling! Very descriptive and clever. I enjoyed the rhythm of this piece. Your highlighted words and stressed meanings give it a great feel and clarity for your ultimate message. Great write!

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

excellent job. you are a great writer. kinda hard to follow, at times, but overall, i loved the idea of this poem. because i hve been that girl many times before. you want to let him in, but you are so conusmed of the past, and the hurt and pain it caused. placing all men in the same category. great job at depicting it. my favorite part is when you say this:

SEE ME!!..but don't feel me

FEEL ME!!..but don't smother me

SPOIL ME!!..but don't baby me

BABY ME!!..but don't change me

CHANGE WITH ME!!..but don't force me

thanks for sharing.

kena

[THE LOST ROSE]

I think I enter into this same contest. Well I won't win a badge on this one. Another great write my brother. This piece is so tight with a little humor and some in your face truth. Again I highlight this whole piece but I am not going to use this whole space. But dropping lines like;

I'm alone but happy and I try to love but then
there's always issues, excuses, and lies
as if a factory's been spitting out these guys

**Give us a chance to be poets. Don't school us too hard!

SEE ME!!..but don't feel me
FEEL ME!!..but don't smother me
SPOIL ME!!..but don't baby me
BABY ME!!..but don't change me
CHANGE WITH ME!!..but don't force me

I needed these lines for my own personal drama that I am in. Thanks!

Again great write I look forward to checking more material from you. Send Read Request to me anytime. Check out my piece "I Didn't Just Hit That". It is about not knowing love but maybe I am in. Peace!

[The DuchessPoet]

Thank you so much for entering this iece into my contest!
I really do like this piece!

[Yereziah]

I really like this its so relatable (not on a personal note), but I hear it all the time...sucks for the man that has to deal with this type of drama...

I love this part... "I've tried to make 'KINDA' work
I've met 'SORTA' and decided to flirt
spent time with 'MAYBE' and found a jerk"

[The DuchessPoet]

Darlin' as the ole folks say, "you put your foot and the better portion of your leg in this poem!"
Your words:
"I frowned as her ego laid it down
"In love I've never been
I'm alone but happy and I try to love but then
there's always issues, excuses, and lies
as if a factory's been spitting out these guys
I've dated and as of late it's
been married, divorced, or separated. Of course,

I've tried to make 'KINDA' work
I've met 'SORTA' and decided to flirt
spent time with 'MAYBE' and found a jerk.
I just can't seem to find that SOME KINDA that's mine"

I've tried kinda it don't work ... sorta is just a jerk and some kinda THAT'S ME!

WOW, this is an awesome write!
Absolutely incredible!