Alone

I made this poem in like 15 minutes so I don't know what you guys will think of it..Thanks for reading!

Alone in the rain,

Alone in the snow,

I am alone, alone, alone.

All around me,

Everyone lets me be,

Always alone, alone, alone.

Feeling down,

Like I'm about to drown,

Always alone, alone, alone.

A small half smile,

A lone lone child,

Always alone, alone, alone.

Alone with no friends,

Yet there's nothing to mend,

Always alone, alone, alone.

No one sees,

And no one cares,

That she's always alone, alone, alone.

Reviews

[Izzie Rohrer]

I loved the simplicity of this poem. It was well written and let you admire the fact that poems don't have to be filled with big fancy words, or have to rhyme, or anything complicated. The subtle way you wrote this poem leaves you room to think but not too much. It gives you a soft but meaningful message and i really felt that you need to know that for 15 minutes you with liguid gold. Good job :)

[ApplesAreAmazing]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. =)

[Izzie Rohrer]

Just curious, i noticed that you wrote books. What kind of stories do you like to write about?

[ApplesAreAmazing]

Hmm...I like to write Teen Fiction & Young Adult books mostly. My finished book "Uncontrollable" was really short because I wrote in Language Arts class, but my main one "Chocolate Ice Cream" is going to be at least 20 chapters. "Uncontrollable" was about a girl who had magical powers for one day, while "Chocolate Ice Cream" is about a girl in high school. I would rather read "Chocolate Ice Cream" than "Uncontrollable" because "Uncontrollable" is really short and "Chocolate Ice Cream" is more my forte.

[Izzie Rohrer]

That's great. I have an account on Wattpad. I am always happy when i see young people writing stories or poems.

[ApplesAreAmazing]

Really?!? I always wanted a Wattpad account, but I'm too young. I'm going to get one on my birthday. What's your account username? Have you heard of TaintedRain on Wattpad? My sister said that TaintedRain has a WritersCafe, too.

[Izzie Rohrer]

No I haven't but i will make sure to check her out. How much longer till your B-day?

[ApplesAreAmazing]

There's about four or five months till my birthday, since It's at the end of November. What's your Wattpad account username?

[ApplesAreAmazing]

Is it Izzie_3vt?

[Izzie Rohrer]

Yes, how did you know :)

[ApplesAreAmazing]

I went to your profile on WritersCafe and looked at the link. =)

[Izzie Rohrer]

Ahh. I didn't even remember i put that there. Huh. But yeah i have one it's really fun to have one. Knowing your love for the writing you will fit right in. It's your kinda place.

[ApplesAreAmazing]

Thank you! =) I can't wait!

[jvava]

This is a simple poem with good repitition. Not overly complicated, but well-thought and well-directed. It made me think about this person's lonliness. Good job!

[ApplesAreAmazing]

Thank you for your comment, jvava!

[annabellee]

aw, this is really sad... I hope it'll get better...
As for the poem, I think it's really well written, I liked the repetition.
And I could totally feel your emotions it really touched me...
Well done :)

[ApplesAreAmazing]

Thank you annabellee! =)

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

This is good...It has a sad tone to it. I like how you used alone three times it helps with the rhythm and flow in my opinion. It's hard being alone and feel like no one cares, everyone feels this every now and then.

Good Job

[ApplesAreAmazing]

Thank you so much! This is my first review from anybody. =)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

You're welcome ^^