Never And Me

Thoughts of a crush, I suppose.

It's 3 a.m.

And I wonder where you are

As the shadows of you

Fade in and out of my memories.

 

Its 4 a.m.

Wondering what could have been.

Pale blueish eyes, never leaving my sights

Somewhere in between sleep and a dream.

 

Its 5 a.m.

Watching the minutes fly

Of every moment spent together

Somewhere between never and me.

Author's Note

What do you think? I'm not sure.

Reviews

[Raindrop]

Love will surely leave us sleepless at one point or another. :) I like how you put the time and than described what you were thinking of...brilliant write! :)

[LittleMissSunshine :)]

I don't think that the title is really fitting for the poem.
Maybe replace "never" with "your heart", or "my lonely dreams?" Just a little suggestion.
I'd have liked to see this poem start at an earlier, time, and continue on later, and later into the night.
It would've been cool to see some obsession weaved into it?

[Brandi Nicole]

i like the poem, but for goodness sake......get some sleep! :)

[Ubiquitous]

Beautifully assembled, and very intriguing. Well done!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I like it...
Everyone wounds up thinking about their crush all day long...at one point or another.

[Rhea]

very creatively done.. :)

[Hazle Eyed Girl]

blue eyed boys/girls, they can be a problem at times and a wonderfulness at others ^^
wonderful job, i can relate to this a lot and it read easily for me.

[paradise]

I likeyy its good

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

great piece !!!

[Dark Beauty]

Nice write!!