On Love

On Love

A Poem by Broken Wings

you know that you have loved
if you see the beauty thats inside
the love that makes you quiver
from love you cannot hide

that love gives you joy
that love gives you pain
when their hand glides across your skin
it sets your heart aflame

this love leaves a footprint
you will never part
you'll remember it forever
a name etched in your heart

love is not always perfect
love is sometimes vain
but it will always shine on through
like sunshine through the rain

© 2013 Broken Wings


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wow this is true indeed.Lovely write

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Broken Wings

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much for all your comments, they have made my day :)
Nkosana B Masuku

10 Years Ago

Every good writing deserves its compliments
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DJ
I really enjoyed reading this piece, so much truth in the words written. Love isn't perfect, it takes a lot of work and commitment but it is beautiful. I like the rhyming flow of this piece. Well written.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Broken Wings

10 Years Ago

Thank you!
Beautiful! The last stanza really stood out for me. It holds so much truth and wisdom. Thank's for your poetic creativity!

Aaron

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Broken Wings

10 Years Ago

Thank you Aaron, I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.
I loved the flow of the poem. It just needs a little polishing, punctuation and capitalization. Without being so brutally technical, it's a great poem. It needs to be read. Thanks!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Broken Wings

10 Years Ago

Thank you Aubrai, yes your right it does need polishing :) I appreciate your feedback.

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Added on July 28, 2013
Last Updated on July 30, 2013
Tags: #love, #beauty

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Broken Wings
Broken Wings

New Zealand



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Hi everyone, I am a student in beautiful New Zealand. My writing stems from my personal experiences and emotions. I am wanting to better my skills, read all your creations and express myself through .. more..

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