Shades of Blue...

The internal ramblings of a broken heart.

Her heart open and raw

Broken, she lay rusted

The one usually ignored

Hurt by those she trusted

 

People look but never see

Eyes pierce through her

The girl with shattered dreams

Quiet, never makes a stir

 

Rust corrodes her broken soul

While the many walls she built

Protects her charred heart of coal

Which lay in pieces; a patchwork quilt

 

No one dares to try and mend

She seems so insignificant to most

Only on herself she does depend

Pain and suffering are her hosts

 

She tries to lose the stormy clouds

That darkens all her days and nights

Hurt and insecurities do shroud

Her will to bask in glowing light

 

Left for dead, raped and abused

Only fragments left of human form

Life residing in shades of blue

No vibrance to keep her warm

 

Until one day, someone took

A sincere second glance

Someone noticed with a look

Is it worth the chance?

 

Untrustingly she pondered

Yet still curious she spoke

There must be an ulterior motive

As her senses all awoke

 

Bitten too much so twice as shy

Her walls remain unshaken

Too scared to chance, afraid to try

For she could be mistaken

 

Too much baggage for a boy

So she resides in solitude

In fear of her hearts destroy

A boy cannot intrude

 

Vulnerability can’t be exposed

Her thoughts he overran

He could be different, she supposed

In hopes he was a man

Author's Note

Emotional write. Sometimes it is hard to know who to trust, especially after being hurt by most who walk into your life, it gets to the point where it seems easier to live in solitude...

Not sure if this is quite finished yet, may do some editing at some stage. Just not sure if it feels quite finished... I hope you enjoy it nonetheless. Please leave comments/suggestions, I love hearing from you all.

Reviews

[DJ]

I like the rhyme in this and you use some nice imagery. The message is sad, one forgotten, the one hurt and abused and now the one scared to take a chance and scared to have people in her life. Thus depriving herself of people that are potentially good for her. But in the end I see hope, I see someone that may take a chance, if the person is a man, not a boy. There is a very big difference between a man and a boy. I like the end in this and if this is about you, I hope one day someone will walk into your life that makes you want to trust again, someone worthy of it. Nicely penned, I enjoyed reading this sad tale. Thanks Cairo.

[Broken Wings]

Thanks Cairo, your words and support really means a lot to me.

[FateDictates]

a consistent solid heartfelt piece.. very honest and open..

[Master K-tops]

I don't think this needs any editing. It's perfect. I love it!

[Vani Jalagar]

Her heart open and raw
Broken, she lay rusted
The one usually ignored
Hurt by those she trusted........ very realistic indeed. It is impossible to survive without trusting anybody , but the question is whom to trust.once broken it shows the way to hell.
very emotional and heart touching :)

[J. Kell]

This is brilliant. Its very beautiful and honest. It is hard to trust and let someone in again after you have been betrayed by someone. I hope this has a happy ending eventually. Great write.

[Broken Wings]

Thank you Justink, I hope so too :)

[Douglas White]

This speaks volumes about the destruction of trust, and the pain that is left behind. This is an emotional write, sure, but also a raw and -honest- write. As such, this is the hardest kind of poem to write, and just as hard to read. It should be. This is so very easy to relate to, because there aren't many who -haven't- had their trust destroyed and hearts broken, and ended up feeling like this.

I wouldn't change a thing with this, because editing it after-the-fact could cause you to re-think the very rawness that makes this so good. This, I think, should be considered finished as-is. You can always write another poem to finish whatever you think is missing.

[Broken Wings]

I think you're right Douglas, thank you so much for your support and encouragement. I think I will keep it as it is. It is raw, so it should be. You're awesome!

[Me]

wow this one really hit home, I could really relate. a powerful haunting read! Excellent :) x

[Broken Wings]

Thank you so much Raven Louise, your words mean so much and I am sorry you can relate... thank you for your comment hun xx

[Tom]

A well versed and rhymed poem that flows well on reading, a somber, reflective story of breach of trust and that's true enough if you've been hurt or let down badly, especially by those that you thought were you friends !

But there's always someone for somebody, just a matter of rebuilding that faith and trust that was so sadly abused ! Nice poem, well penned !

[Broken Wings]

Thank you Tom! Yes it is hard after being let down by almost everyone in my life to let another in- leaving me vulnerable. Thank you for your encouragement. I sure hope your right :)

[London's Lily]

This is beautiful, and achingly rings true to me. I've had a half-finished poem I've been working on for weeks, of this exact topic, so I completely understand how you feel. In your note where you say "it seems easier to live in solitude," that is precisely what I've been struggling with, myself. I also felt a connection with, "Eyes pierce right through her," that feeling of no one truly knowing you, no matter how close they might think they are. Wonderfully written poem. :)

[Broken Wings]

Thank you so much Lily... And I'm sorry you can relate to this. It's not easy when you feel like no one truly knows you, it's also not easy thinking it's best to live in solitude either. I am struggling with that. Fear of getting hurt again, too scared to someone in even though they could potentially be good for me, who knows right? After being hurt by almost everyone in my life, it's hard to open up. Poetry is such a good release.

[Hana Saemon]

interesting....very interesting. ;)

[Broken Wings]

Hmmm.... Why?? LOL