Inside..

A poem about how I think all of us feel at times.

It's dark and it's dreary in here.

The black surrounds,

Cutting off all sound.

My heart beats fast and loud.

I scream,

And yet no sound comes out.

Walls around me rise,

My veins turn to ice.

Panic takes control,

My hands shake,

My head aches.

I beat at the walls,

They don't fall.

I'm trapped away inside myself,

My mind my own cell.

My hands are bloodied and torn.

I scream my rage,

My fear,

Yet no one sees my pain.

How?

How can they not see?

How can they not hear?

How?

How can they sit, smileing,

Talking and laughing.

Oblivious to whats right in front of them.

Do they not see my shaking hands?

Hear my anguished cries?

How do they allow my pain to pass them by?

How?

Or more importantly,

Why?

Author's Note

Please critisize. I need to be knocked down first in order to build back up, even stronger. Hope you enjoy!
Love,
CreativeCookie

Reviews

[Silent Wolf]

Yes. This describes us, or at least me. There are some places that are grammatically incorrect. For example, the one that really stood out to me was "My mind my own cell." There should be a comma between mind and my, like this: "My mind, my own cell." Also, misspelt smiling. There are a few other errors, but I don't want to be mean, so I'll just let it go unless you want me to tell, in which case I will. Otherwise, a really great poem here, and one that I actually would want to read. :3

[CreativeCookie]

Mean reviews are my favorite, so be brutal!

[Silent Wolf]

Lol tomorrow when I have my computer and am more awake. :)

[dadist poetic]

love it..and I can relate

[Marvin]

its a great one creative cookie. relax and sharpen your pencil once more :)

[Steve M]

I really enjoyed this poem. The raw emotions and the helplessness really hits home.

[The Invisible Girl]

This is really good. Showed a lot of emotion!! Keep it up!! 100/100 :)