Until He Is Gone

Until He Is Gone

A Poem by Carrie Montgomery

Breathe

in

out

try to remain calm

Blink

close

open

try not to stare

Focus

think "here"

think "now"

don't think about then

Stop

hold steady

hold tight

don't let him see pain

Smile

say "hi"

say ANYTHING

Don't you DARE freeze up

Take

it in

all of it

the smile

the smell

the voice

the tilt of the head

the very rhythm of him

But

Remember to

BREATHE

BLINK

FOCUS

SMILE

SPEAK

HOLD STEADY...

until he is gone

© 2008 Carrie Montgomery


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i love the style of this one. great job. very creative.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very creative... I could see feel the nervousness of a person telling them this stuff inside while they shake on the outside... trying to hide those overwhelming feelings for someone you have deep feeling for is tough and you did great to express it.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a great piece and definetly what I was looking for as I created the "Past the Heartache" contest. You can actually feel each thought, each moment.....the beginning steps of getting past the heartache. Thank you for sharing and submitting this great write!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

well let me just say that this is a vry good piece, I think everybody that reads it is going to be able to relate it to their "him" for everyone this could mean so many things for some it is as simple as what is written, for others, it is that blackness, that it or thought that throws us into a panic attack that we must talk our way through; whatever this is excellent.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i am disturbed by your poems... that is a good thing to say ...because your poems actually appeal intellectually

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a great look at your thoughts in the moment. Really lets the reader step inside. Great piece!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is the same feeling I had when I met up with an old lover I never forgot. Five years ago, he came to my house with a plummer(he was his helper) and I nearly passed out. His aura just flooded my whole being and my husband and I sat on the couch watching the two men work. I had this terrible urge to run to this guy and kiss him to death.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I could completely relate to this. When my wife was diagnosed with cancer, each time I faced the approaching death of a beloved pet -- your words describe those terrible moments from the inside.



Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

great write....

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Interesting. I got a couple of images in my mind as I read this, then re-read it to see if the same images came back. They did, and that was hard to imagine! Well done, clearly stated and a chiller of a work

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Carrie Montgomery
Carrie Montgomery

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About Me I am a mother of 2. A 13 yr old and a 1 yr old.. happily married -depending what day it is!;) ~Self-Portrait~ tow-headed in summer's sun ;dirty-blonde in winter's chill.Eyes of green, w.. more..

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