The phone call

Okay i just got out of Writers Block so tell me honestly what you think

I get out of the shower,
I hear a ring.
It comes again
I walk over to my phone.
This loud, over powering sound
Pushes me to the floor.
I get up, and I am pushed back on the floor,
My towel draping over my cold, wet body.
Ring, Ring,
The over powering, helpless sound
Finds it way to the floor with me
 I answer
"Hello"
 The ring is all I received.
I crash,
Throw,
And break my cell phone.
Still, I hear that over powering ring.
What was it?

By this time my ears felt like rocks.
I look out side.
It is you.

I run out side after I am dressed,

I hug you,

Kiss you

Tell you that I have missed you,

Ask you to stay,

I am lonely,

I have missed you.
It's you

Author's Note

I want honesty...did it catch your attention? Did you like it? I really don't want to know Oh it was good...I want to know why

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Ms. Melissa,

Writing is a collaboration of heart and mind; such heart can be found in your writing here but it seems that you rushed through when writing it. Also, don't confuse writer's block with just a lack of interest, ha ha. Don't get me wrong, I did like this poem. But put your stanzas in your poems so that it helps the eye flow. It also helps creating a sense of Flow. And rhyming always helps, if you're ever stuck on a rhyme or wanting to practice to get better at rhyming, don't be afraid to use a rhyming dictionary. Rhymezone.com is something I use if I'm stuck on a rhyme. You do have a potential to become better, but do not feel discouraged because inside each of us lies the potential for multiplied talent: even you. :) Keep writing, kudos. 6.7/10.

Sincerely,
S. W. Scaggs