Guest

Who let you in?

A hum, A tone

rejoiced alone 

is glee 

from me to me.

A laugh, A cheer

When friends are here

is gold

thats doled

in excess.

But

A pang, A void,

A heart destroyed

is gloom,

a guest 

who knows you best

when empty is the room.

 

Reviews

[H L Rose]

I absolutely love how elusive yet full of significance this is.

The first stanza is for sure my favorite, because I love the flow and way the words sound.

I’m not going to lie, I was a bit disappointed when the rest of the poem didn’t follow the same intriguing pattern, but I see each stanza got longer which could have been intentional, so if that’s where your creative heart took you, don’t let my personal opinion stop you.

I am absolutely horrible with iambs and I’m definitly working on that skill, but if I’m not wrong you’ve used them throughout the entire poem quite well!

I really enjoyed reading this poem!

[Jstmds]

I love the rythm in reading this. Especially the first and the last verse are striking to me.
Even though it seemed unnatural to me at first how the length of the verses progress, I grew more and more fond of it reading it again and again.
This is a great poem, well done.

[emipoemi]

........I have no words.......my voice is in my awe!! Holy kwap this is awesome! Well done!

[Ookpik]

I like the way you utilize tempo in your writing - the patient rhythm and a) a) b) b) - c) d) d) c) rhyme scheme give me a sense of a ballad - haiku hybrid.

Nice work and am excited to see the way your style progresses.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we need to be our own best company...if not...we will be very lonely...even in a crowded room.

i really like this poem...great personification...
j.

[neurostar burns]

I am sure I recognize the message. One important thing, it encourages exploring, being open enough to get to know the environments. Really swell composition! Like it big! Centers on: a guest who knows you best. A real opener!
neurostar

[Aesthetic Trash]

Damn...this was amazing. I felt a connection with the writing my current emotions.

[Gaston Villanueva]

Very intriguing style with nice word selection
Thanks for sharing it

[Zoya]

Not really sure what you're trying to convey with this one but the flow and rhyme scheme do catch the readers' attention. Enjoyed it!