Only Once In A Thousand Lifetimes

Twenty words is never enough...

Only Once In A Thousand Lifetimes...
I have found you at last, a fragment of soul,
My missing puzzle piece...

My love, I tried to capture my feelings for you,
In twenty words.
But these weak fingers, they fail me.

What they impress upon the paper,
Is only a shadow of the truth.
A ghost of the reality I know.

The length of a page cannot hope to contain,
What I feel.
The lives in dreams I've had of you.

If I could impart to you my thoughts,
The heartbeat of my soul,
I would give you an unending dream.

We'd dance beneath the weeping sky.
As the moon smiled down on us,
We two would watch your sisters shine.

In poetry and stories would I pen us,
A happy ending that never dies,
Eternity and youth written in rhyme.

You are my only, a Fallen Sunlit Star;
Inspiration to a simple poet prince.
This captive summer wolf's Sapphire Queen.

You're the most beautiful thing my eyes have seen.
Even if you are dust and ash,
My heart is yours.

Was it chance that placed us there that day?
A product of mere happenstance?
Was it the hand of Fate?

Of all the stars that plummeted from the heavens,
It had to be you.
I caught you as you fell.

Once upon a time is often how it starts.
A fairytale kind of thing.
True Love doesn't happen every day.

Only Once In A Thousand Lifetimes...
I have found you at last, a fragment of soul,
My missing puzzle piece...

Author's Note

"This diamond ring doesn't shine for me anymore,
And this diamond ring doesn't mean what it did before..."



The idea for making the poem readable from top to bottom and vice versa is borrowed from a piece titled; The End/of/The Beginning by Keegan D'souza. Below is the link.

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/KeeD/1176111/

Reviews

[Sir Joe]

Love, indeed, inspires, but returned love inspires more.

Twenty words is not enough for one to fathom love. Neither it is to describe the magnitude of this work of yours.

The poetic persona's expression of love to his other half is so strong that each of the stanzas he expresses can even stand alone with its richness of thought and passion.

After reading the poem, I felt so glad; not for myself though, but for the speaker (which is probably you, Caradoc) for he has finally found the woman of her dreams, the woman with whom he will live happily ever after. What's next, then? Wedding, perhaps? =)

Poetry is a great way to express great feelings. The happiness springing from the writer can be reverberated through his works. I, for one, caught that ripple. A smile flashed on my face. I even thought that I was reading a Renaissance product. This poem is highly romanticized, for me, but it added an effect of genuineness of thought and sincerity of expression.

What it lacks -- rhyme and meter consistency -- is compensated by its richness in imagery and other literary devices -- figures of speech, defamiliarization and objective correlative (which I need not to enumerate for their being so many). The reversibility element you devised also added some appeal to the poem. I read it backwards and surprisingly, the flow went as smoothly as it did when I read it from top to bottom.

I'm glad I came across this piece. Ms. Belle was right in saying I would like this poem.



- joe

[Caradoc]

Thank you for that long and wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed this.

[Sir Joe]

The pleasure is mine, Caradoc.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Oh no, I'm falling in love!... lol

Your words would swoon any romantic heart... each line carries the beauty of sweet confessions for your love...
This is what fairytales are made of, what every Princess needs (desires for)... a poetic Prince...

Breathtaking write, Caradoc... (sigh)

[Caradoc]

Thank you, both for the read and review, and also for fixing a problem I was having with this piece. I can once again see the review my Sapphire left for me.

I am very glad you enjoyed this.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I love this... beautifully expressed...

[Frieda P]

Gorgeous read, I can't pick one stanza that I like best, they're all enthralling, bravo, this is excellent!

[Caradoc]

Thank you.

[Frieda P]

It was my pleasure to read you...

[KeeD]

This is beautiful, this is something that just pulls at my heart because it's not only the concept of falling in love it also shows the feeling of being accepted by love. It read strong both ways and had such wonderful meaning.

[Caradoc]

Thank you so much. It's a pleasure to see a review from you on this piece since your idea is what inspired me to format it the way I did. I'm glad you liked it.

Have a really great day.

[SyberRose]

Its is so nice when we can be inspired by other poets...and this is the first time I ever read a poem from bottom to top...beautifully penned and very creative...enchanting piece of work and loved the title...:)

[Caradoc]

I have been inspired by quite a few poets on this site actually. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. The subject matter is very close to my heart.

Thank you.

[Cool Handless Luke]

a beautiful piece of work my friend. a testament to your inspiration. i love the idea of it reading both ways - never thought of that. a challenge no doubt. well done.

[Caradoc]

Thank you my friend. Sorry it took me so long to get back to you.

[Palm Tree]

Gabriel...I am speechless...This is beyond beautiful. The poem would have been outstanding just reading it normally. But reading it backward just reinforced the beautiful words. It makes you feel the emotions more intensely. I love this. It is probably one my favorites out of all of you poems.

[Caradoc]

Thanks Palm Tree.

I don't know if it's just me, but for some reason the page isn't loading Sapphire's review...either that or it just won't let Me see it. Which is pissing me off...

[Palm Tree]

It must just be you. I had to scroll all the way down to the bottom of the screen. But hers is there :-)

[Caradoc]

I guess it is then. Grr...that's so frustrating...

[Angi]

I loved reading this from bottom to top. I have never seen another work that promts you to do that. There are never enough words, are there? Beautiful. Angi~

[Caradoc]

Thank you.

If you enjoyed that little bit, I suggest following the link in my AN. It's to the piece that gave me the idea to do that.

[Pax]

Bravo.... a meaningful one for the special one.... a love expressed in heartfelt words and beautiful imagery... Mr. Poet Prince you have penned an amazing romatic piece....

[Caradoc]

Thank you very much, my friend.

[Dewella~Vintella]

That was fantastic, and personally, I like the flow better reading it backwards. Truly amazing, Cara. Your feelings flowed beautifully with every line.

[Caradoc]

Thank you so much, Dew.

Writing this was quite emotional for me. I kept trying to pin it down in twenty words but everything I thought didn't sound right. Then I wrote stanza two and everything else began to flow perfectly.