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Remembrance

Remembrance

A Poem by Carl Drake Barnard


 



Remembrance


 


Taking


these final steps


Acting all


alone


Lustful


love


Impeding


it


Tenderly


tainted


Hanging all my


hopes


Abandoning our


affair


Manipulative


memories


Yearning


you


 


Like my


lovesick


Owl,ignoring my


obeys,only to fall in


Vain,for he is


vulnerable to


Earthly


emotions...





© 2014 Carl Drake Barnard



Author's Note

Carl Drake Barnard
Another hard new age poem,I have to admit I had to take some time with this. As you'll probably see this poem has words, but before your minds ran,let me explain this this. I wrote this in a certain why to bring out my hidden message in the poem. So yes there is two pieces in each other :) I really hope you get what I'm trying to say and thank you for reading it! :)

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I see this is done in acrostic ---
by the way its design...
and the write has a meaning...
intended for the person of interest..
and that goes along with this work...

Posted 3 Years Ago


Carl Drake Barnard

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reading it man :) and giving your thoughts
Glen Yumang Manese

3 Years Ago

you're welcome...
This is great Carl! I really enjoyed the way you set up this poem. I'm sorry Talitha got away!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Carl Drake Barnard

3 Years Ago

HEhe yah she was more the woman type in the end but shes a good friend though thanks for reading :)
TALITHA MY LOVE was the hidden code here ...

Posted 3 Years Ago


Carl Drake Barnard

3 Years Ago

Haha yes it was :)
We are human and sometimes emotions come into play that were never expected to happen. Life can drift people apart emotionally and then things happen that were never suppose to happen. Love can be fleeting. I like the way this poem is set up and the word choices here are strong without going over board.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Poetic Beauty

3 Years Ago

I just stumbled upon your writing and I am glad I did. Deep thoughts in this piece.
Carl Drake Barnard

3 Years Ago

Hehe don't peek through all of them I express my headings,and I think about form to all of them even.. read more
Poetic Beauty

3 Years Ago

I write about a great many things and many different pieces and styles appeal to my brain. I will d.. read more
Beautifully brilliant write Carl, very unique and eloquently poignant write with the stirring, relateable
imagery your words captured here. i love the unique format as well, very clever, acrostic

Great, very moving write...thanks for sharing! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Carl Drake Barnard

3 Years Ago

Thank you Barrie for such an Inspirational review :) Means a lot to me :D
ms. barrie

3 Years Ago

you welcome, Carl. i very much enjoyed reading it. will re visit your writes soon, be well :)
Well, well, Carl... Look at this! :))
So proud of you!... I see you finished this piece, wonderfully!

To see the final touches makes me smile...

You have painted an impassioned emotion... Indeed!
Nicely done! ;D


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carl Drake Barnard

3 Years Ago

thanks Robbie :)
Very different set up for an acrostic. So Talitha did you wrong? What a poignant write...and the stanzas are set apart like your heart....ripped apart. Not sure what to make of the "ignoring my obeys"....perhaps you were too demanding and controlling in the relationship? Hmm.....not sure, but I did like the poem. Lydi**

Posted 3 Years Ago


Carl Drake Barnard

3 Years Ago

thank you lydi! :) Talitha and I were kinda together but she just left without a goodbye or anything.. read more
'Talitha my love', lucky Talitha, whoever she may be, it read bittersweet...seems the memories were a bit skewed. Nicely pen'd.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Carl Drake Barnard

3 Years Ago

:) Hehe yes, thank you for the review and your kind words! :) much appreciated.
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

You're welcome, I like the structure of your poem, enjoyed. :-)

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Added on January 24, 2014
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Tags: love, passion, corruption, lust

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Carl Drake Barnard
Carl Drake Barnard

South Africa



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Hi,I am Carl. I'm a Chef and a writer. I am melancholy-Rage writer as the past have said. And I am like this in real life. I write what I know and stay true to feelings as I discover them in life. more..

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