Breaking Point

Breaking Point

A Poem by Heromen Selena

Pushed to my limit
A soft wind is all it takes
To send me over the edge
And take me where ever
I may lay for the rest of time

Pressure compacts me inside
Unable to reach the outside world
Going through my thoughts alone
Making a choice
And then going through with it

I tower over the edge
Poke and prodded to give in
To fall and give up
This is it, the beginning of me
I bend my knees and jump for my life.

© 2012 Heromen Selena


Author's Note

Heromen Selena
I have no idea where this came from. Let me know what you think!

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wow, that is amazing. the raw emotion inside helps the words flow and seem like they are alive .. good job

Posted 11 Years Ago


Heromen Selena

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
This poem is proof that some of the best writing comes out when you're not forcing it. This is awesome.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Heromen Selena

11 Years Ago

:) Thanks.
It sounds like the moments of someone beforesuicide ^^
It's very nice -w-

Posted 11 Years Ago


Heromen Selena

11 Years Ago

Thank you :) I'm not suicidal.
Hachamecha

11 Years Ago

Ahahaha ^^
Well, it was my thoughts on it aha
I can write about how much rainbows I ca.. read more
Heromen Selena

11 Years Ago

haha! I know I was just letting you know :P
Very much enjoyed this piece...reminds me of a metaphor of taking a chance in life- that point where you make the decision to let the wind take you, letting go of control.....great work, thanks for sharing :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Heromen Selena

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
The imagery and description in this is in depth and gives a picture through the minds eye, thanx for writing ^.^ it's excellent.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Heromen Selena

11 Years Ago

Thank you!
quarintine_deathangel

11 Years Ago

Thanx for the read request XD
A rather sad poem. The ending almost sounds like suicide or perhaps just giving up under negative pressure. I really like this poem. It must come from a painful place that perhaps you are not yet aware off. The pressure of life can send a person into the dark places within. The challenge is to be strong and find one's way out. This is what I took away from reading you really good well written poem. It flows naturally when read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Heromen Selena

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Not knowing where it came from is not a bad thing...What I do know is that I too have been to this place, actually often. In the last stanza the end is the new beginning as the realization that motion is new moments and optimistic possibilities.

You got my attention...

Posted 11 Years Ago


Heromen Selena

9 Years Ago

Thanks! I try my best.
Wonderful poem, a sort of stream of conscience write, but also it had a depth to it. Meaning shone through this and the last two stanza's seemed to be a resolve of some sort, to leave the past where it belongs and jump into the next stage, that I'm sure is going to be a new you! Good work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Heromen Selena

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much :)
Helena

11 Years Ago

You are very welcome!
This a sad poem, but beautifully put.
Good job
Sarah :-)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Heromen Selena

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
amazing flow and very inspiring!! keep it up :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


Heromen Selena

11 Years Ago

Thank you!

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