Silhouette

This was my very first attempt at writing.

I find myself in many ways coincidentally similar to a silhouette.

Not being understood by the true essence of my consciousness, only being viewed as a solid figure, seen against the light. 

While having this luminous, radiant light surround my edges, showing my crevices and outlining details, creating a 'profile' inevitably giving any observer poor perspicacity.

 This light conveying a certain perception enabling people to deem what they want of my entity ought' to be prohibited for mere consideration that the absolute mystifying context of my being doesn't really exist, based purely upon this 'silhouette'

Reviews

[Serenity Faith]

This was your first attempt at writing? Don't you mean you successfully made a piece of art? I loved this! It seems people do only see only what they want to of ourselves, taking only what they see on the outside. Judging us, and not really seeing the inner details. We're all a bunch of moving silhouettes in that sense. Very well done ^_^

[Natasha]

i love your concept on one simple idea and expanding the horizons to go into detail form. this seems like a poem or word language I would write in - therefore I understand it well. It's amazing how just our silhouette or physical being in itself has so much impact on how others view us as an individual- much more so than our actual personality- visual qualities are much different than what we have to offer personality/brain wise.

[soliloquy]

Ummm. You think too much. :0)

Kidding. You use of the language is impressive and you are obviously thoughtful, and insightful.

[Words Of Rooted Design]

No, joke, I think entirely too much. My minds two greatest assets - Adderall and Macbook lol

[soliloquy]

Please dont misunderstand. You are insightful and wise-obviously.

[lee von cleef]

The silhouette,what a inviting thought to draw on, Southwest sky's carved above wild horses,stone still,gold in the half light,now dark,black again,still so hot your "silhouette"

[BLBrown]

The silhouette...what a wonderful metaphor for self, as you so aptly use it here. I love the whimsy of the word, "coincidentally," almost like a poetic wink of the eye.

You attempt to enlighten yourself through awareness of your true being, "true essence," as yous say. Then you shift to the physical, "...solid figure, seen against the light." Interesting...spirit to physical, "...surround my edges, showing my crevices." Love that!

I confess I had to use the dictionary for the word, "perspicacity." The meaning, "the capacity to assess situations or circumstances shrewdly and to draw sound conclusions." "Yes, she's not really just using big words, she uses them well!" I thought. You are almost stern in this self assessment. Perfect! I'm so tired of flowery and unnecessarily long words in poetry.

I confess to being a bit lost in the last line. As I understand it, you are saying that you are more than just the silhouette, and people should not be allowed to judge you as such. Yes?

Excellent poem and welcome to the world of writing!! I'm 52 and have been writing seriously for about 4 years now...I do so love it and hope to publish someday. Thanks for the RR!

[Words Of Rooted Design]

I'm more than satisfied at your dissection of this write. I wouldn't have it perceived any other way.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A very intelligent comparison between yourself and a silhouette... I certainly never thought of it that way.

[DalainaRenee]

Very nice!

[Skye]

Oh wow, this was lovely to read. Beautiful and full of meaning.