The Angels don't cry for me.

A very old poem. I learn you can't be forgiven. Just to live with the foolishness.

The Angels don' cry for me.

The kind Angels don't cry or pray for a man with no conscious.

They can give only soft caresses to calm uncontrolled anger and energy.

I sat by the Monterey Bay wishing to be somewhere else.

I was haunted by mistakes.

My greed for flesh and money had  left me alone and desperate.

The sun fell into sea. I watched the first star appear.

I wished upon the first star.

For a dark eyed girl to come back to me.

Then I remembered I was the foolish man  who left her.

Left her with tears in her beautiful brown eyes.

Her haunting words are a part of me now." Please stay." If I left her.

No-one would ever love me again."

 I sat drowning in self pity and anger.

Wished a fool's dream.

To go back in time and hold on.

Angels don't forgive the cold and heartless men.

Men who drain young flesh and leave them for dead.

I found her once.

My brown eyed girl came to me.

She put her arms around me.

Whispered "I forgive you. Please take care of yourself."

She walked away with a true love hand in hand.

I saw she found joy in a man who knew he held a real diamond.

I drank my tequila alone and told the world to back off by the Seaside ocean.

I fell into the sea.

Trying to feel some kind of emotion.

I finally cried  tears for breaking a sweet woman heart.

I sat and waited for the sun to rise from the east.

Not knowing if a man could be forgiven for deeds done without heart or conscious?

I pray to the Gods of the sea, the sky and the earth for forgiveness.

I tossed the tequila down. I walked the cold and lonely beach.

The kind Angels are crying for me now.

They are praying for a man who held greed and hate as his love.

I sat by the sea wet,cold and understanding.

Love is the most beautiful and sweetest gift.

 When a sweet woman open up her heart and soul to you.

Hold on to her tightly.

Give long and sweet kisses.

Don't let go.

                                    Coyote

                                  Sept 1992

Author's Note

A re-write. I'm thankful for the help I received on this site. My writing had improved. Thank you kind writers.

Reviews

[UnendingOceans]

Rule 17: Omit needless words (from the Elements of Style by Strunk and White). I point this out because I think this would be a stronger poem if you remove the underbrush that serves no purpose. Get rid of the words that don't move the images, feelings, and thoughts forward. If you have trouble finding them, read the poem aloud. You'll hear the places it stumbles.

[KaySea]

Amazingly written. Very well done and great work. :)

[AK]

Wow! This poem is amazing! So well written! The emotions are very well conveyed. I love how you incorporated angels into this poem. Great job, keep writing!

[WillowWhisper]

Very beautiful, strong, and moving. There is a very feminine energy that flows like a river through your words, the emotion is deep and binding.

[Kaya]

This is beautiful, as with all your writing, it offers up such a rich and beautiful story. It doesn't rush in all at once to grab the readers attention. Its more gentle, more subtle and because of that more powerful than a lot of the poems on here. Stunning.

[Pax]

very much expressive emotional poem. I always enjoyed your poetic tales.
well done my friend.

[Rhianne Ney]

This is an expressive poem... the evil men hides in their heart can corrupt the brain and control someone... I don't know much about love because I've never felt it but you gave me an idea about how it hurts... There is a quote I read on tumblr which says that "a man who cries for a woman, can never find another one the same like her" that's the point I see in here... The man regrets what he had done, for letting greed grip him that he ignores love... He don't have to worry though because God forgives as long as their is life, we can still pay for our mistakes (;

[Soul Fire]

Beautiful

[Revolutionary]

you have such a feminine heart for such a manly man.I love your tales of love and loss.I also thank you for your kind reviews.I hAve been busy with fair season 15 hr days back to back with circus jumps in between.I lost track of my read requests.I have 1300 of them.I have no time to write or even think but I can find time to read the work of a couple people .You are one.

[Amanda J. S.]

This is so sweet! one can really see that you've "found the light"