Two short poems.

Just words

                       

 Was I the one who made your smile?
Did I stir-up your hope and dreams?
Did I seduce your heart?
Or did my love make you depart my life.

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I told the red haired beauty.
I knew passion once.
Passion must expand and multiply.
If not.
You have abandoned your lover.

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                John Castellenas/Coyote

Author's Note

New poetry. I hope you like.

Reviews

[June Fowler]

The end of ur second poem could sound better this way, Passion must..........If not it will die! I hope ur not offended, just my thoght of hitting the nail on the head.

Your first poem could end with only depart, my life is understood or u could put it into brackets. U could end it the other way too....or did my love do otherwise! left for the reader to use his/her imagination.

Constructive critisesum, no offence ment.

Regards June
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[Coyote Poetry]

Can't offend me. I appreciate the honest comment dear friend.

[June Fowler]

Thanks for not feeling bad, gained a good friend in you dear John. Love to all the family at home.read moreThanks for not feeling bad, gained a good friend in you dear John. Love to all the family at home.
June

[Isimbabi]

Real nice...I could learn a thing or two from your poems

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Isimbabi. I appreciate the comment.

[Lydia Shutter]

So unusual to see short poems form you, John. I liked both of these. It is true, if the passion is not there, it is not worth staying. We all hope our presence makes the other person smile. If loving a person makes them leave, they are not ready for a relationship....and not worth worrying about. Good work here. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Lydia. I'm trying to be less epic.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Beautiful as always romantic poet.

Was I the one who made your smile?
Did I stir-up your hope and dreams?

And 2 poems in one lovely.

God bless Benita

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Benita. I always appreciate your comment.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're welcome I've missed you
stopping by and reading your work I'm going to
have to read more but we're moving into another apartment in our neighborhood Wednesday 19 so will be busy for awhile. Take care Benita

[Kshitij Gupta]

This has a good flow and has been written elegantly. Being new to poetry myself, I loved it!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yes, i like it very much. Excellent poems.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Danny for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome :)

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The first piece offers questions many of us have or have had in the past... perhaps the answer is yes to all of them!

And the second piece offers words of wisdom: once we fail to expand passion, multiply it or constantly find ways to renew it, the love grows stale...

[Coyote Poetry]

You are correct on both. Love need reminders or love will forget. Thank you for reading and the comment.

[Indra Neil]

wonderful and thought provoking imagery! they have an aura of mystery which makes them more profound! well done!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Indra. I appreciate the comment.

[Indra Neil]

u r welcome!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I like how the word "passion" in the second poem defines the content of the questions asked in the previous one.

Good write.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree and thank you for reading and the comment.