This wicked waltz

Just words

          This wicked waltz

Perfect beauty is waiting for me and she is dressed in a perfect red rose  dress.
Her tempting shoulders and her flowing auburn hair make my blissful creature.
My goddess, angel, muse and my siren.

I found her by the lake. She was a sleeping flower waiting for someone to make her come alive.
To find unknown and to swim in deep madness.

I stole her away to my secret places and she left a lover waiting. I promised her dance, Paris and
dreamless nights where we would sing and dance to the rising moon.

We would watch the stars light-up the night and I promised to write her a thousand words of love.
She was a eternal beauty, filled with celestial light of hope and love. She made my madness fade away and
she create song of love to consume my heart.

Tonight we are in the city of Basel. Far from the rules and the secure life left behind. Our love blessed
by no-one. I go to her. The Wicked waltz is playing. I took her hands, brought her close and I whispered.

Forbidden kiss, never forgotten. Simmering love need to grow to the volcano of the chaos of the  places of no
return.  You are my angel, you are my devil. Let's dance and make the Gods jealous.  True love is seldom touched. Tonight I'm wood and you are my fire. I love you dear lover.
                                  John Castellenas/Coyote

Author's Note

Just words.

Reviews

[DevKass92]

A beautifully written Waltz for two lovers. Especially enjoyed the part of this Waltz that was dedicated to that with the Ocean. Beautiful imagery too. I think it should read 'an eternal beauty', if i'm not wrong. Was there any purpose to your structure, out of curiosity? Or an (un)intended meaning with your structure, considering the Waltz is a structured dance?
Overall, a mellifluous Waltz with pretty metaphors and images. At times, it feels a bit too simple, but then again there can be a lot of simplicity to love, and even a Waltz, especially when performed hand in hand and in unison. A very pleasant read. Thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the help. I do appreciate.

[Valentine]

Nothing like holding that special someone in a slow dance. Valentine

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree. Dancing is where two people can become one to the sound of good song. Thank you dear friend for reading and the comment.

[William Liston]

This is very powerful for "just words." I loved the descriptions in this...it really created a feeling of peace and harmony--the perfect feelings for two lovers to have. I really liked the line "she was a sleeping flower waiting for someone to make her come alive"...that's a very vivid yet subtle metaphor. You conveyed lovliness very well in this piece. Well done.

-William Liston

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you William. All of us need to be awaken.

[thaleeyaLuna]

Beautiful poem, and nicely written. I loved the flow and the image it created.
It felt like I was reading a poem from romanticist poets of long ago.
Oh, and I loved the title too. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the comment. I have been reading the ancient writers lately. Good motivation for us to write.

[Ruth]

Gives the soul a sigh this one, a gentle pace that envelops the heart :) Beautifully told hon and in your usual lovely manner :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you dear friend. I enjoy your visits.

[Ruth]

Welcome sweetheart x

[Deuces]

Missed your writing, my friend. Another piece of visual bliss. Awesome. To be someone's wood to their fire... perfection.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right my friend. To be someone reasons to be alive. A perfect place and thank you for reading.

[Pryde Foltz]

A really beautiful and romantic write, here, John. Would melt any feeling heart:):):)

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Pryde. I appreciate the comment.

[Lyn Anderson]

A very sensual and beautiful tale you paint here. Less personal sounding, perhaps, but a lovely poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend. I loved the dance hall as a young man. Friend ship made because of the dance. Are not forgotten.

[barleygirl]

This message is full of poetic & descriptive word crafting. I like that this is much more descriptive than your usual postings . . . it very much helps the reader see & feel how you are being swept away by this encounter. I love the way you're showing more vulnerability than usual: "I promised to write her a thousand words of love." Also, this is a great line: "Tonight I'm wood and you are my fire."

[Coyote Poetry]

The last line you stated. Old ancient words. I appreciate the comment my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"did you ever dance with the devil in the moonlight?"


mmm...wicked good poem that takes us places...to the roots of relationship to where the relationship can go and grow...and become something that almost transcends this world...

j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe I did in Texas once. Thank you Jacob for reading and the comment.