Two out of three ain't bad.

Two out of three ain't bad.

A Poem by Coyote Poetry
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Lonely are the people who wasted love and friendship.

"
















Two out of three ain't bad.










I was sitting alone in a Austin tavern in 1996.
Drinking long Island ice teas.
Trying to get blinded.

A old man dressed poorly ordered a water.
Bartender gave him a bad look and walked away.
I told the bartender.
"Give the old man what he wants."
The old man smiled.
Told the bartender.
"Same as my new friend."

He drank the Long Island ice tea quickly.
I ordered him another.
He thanks me.
Asked me.  "Was I alright?"

I told him.
"Not too good.
But I will be fine."

He touched my back.
Told me.
"You got two out of three.
Better then most of us."

He looked outside to the cold rainy night.
Told me.
"All three are hard to hold on to.
You got the booze. Number one.
You still got the road. Number two.
You still got a lot of living left."

"The third one ain't so easy.
Love cost a lot."

I bought another round.
He raised the Long Island.
Make a cheer to life.
"To the road.
To better days.
To good booze and wine.
To sweet woman lost on the road."

He smiled and told me "I was successful once.
I had the big house.
The beautiful wife waiting for me."

"I choose the booze.
I loved the road too much.
Now I sitting with you.
Alone and wishing I held on tighter."


I looked into his sad eyes.
Asked him. "What was really important?"

He smiled.
Told me to order him a double shot of whiskey.
I ordered the whiskey.
He drank in down quickly.

He whispers "Hold on, tightly and be thankful.
If you find the sweet woman.
Who loved you.
Hold on.
Nothing as sad as a old man dying alone."

I left him.
Gave him a few dollars.
Thanks him for the advice.


I learn two out of three isn't so good.
Need someone to love and care for you.



Before it is too late.



              Coyote 


             3 July 1996   

© 2011 Coyote Poetry



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I was sitting alone in a(n) Austin tavern. (When a is followed by a word started with a voel it becomes an)

A(n) old man dressed poorly ordered a water. (same deal as above)

Bartender gave him a bad look and walk(ed) away. (you switched tense in the middle of your sentence)

The old man smile(d). (same deal as above)

He thank(ed) me.
Ask(ed) me (if I) was I alright? (same as the last two)

He touche(d) my back. (^^)

th(a)n most of us. (then = time, than = comparison)


He look(ed) outside (tense issue again)

to the cold(,) rainy night.

Love cost(s) alot."

Ma(d)e a cheer to life. (tense again)

To sweet woman losts on the road. (no s on lost)

He smile(d) and told me

Now I('m) sitting with you. (you want I am sitting, not I sitting)

I look(ed) into his sad eyes. (tense again, but even in present no s on look)

He smile(d). (tense)

Thank(ed) him for the advice. (same as look)

learn(ed) two out of three isn't so good. (tense)

A few good lines in here. It didn't quite live up to my expectations based on the title, but only because I love the song too much

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Zoe
this tells a great moral to live by.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow. That was a pleasure to read. nothing better than a story to bring out the real message in the writing. I liked it. :D

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2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Is this a true story? It's very touching. Very honest.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

An interesting poem my friend!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very powerful. I wish my father could have read this before he made the same decision.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is a good theme….you have chosen….
But ..presentation is imperfect…I think…
I think …you wrote this in a hurry….
It needs editing….


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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Some things are worth listening to, but in the end we all have to choose!

enjoyed thank you

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KL
As always, your words are like that of a native chieftain sharing his words of wisdom around the coals. Another poem to remember, but I've got to ask... do you not put effort into editing your writings before putting them up? Everything you have on Writerscafe has so much potential but is always infinitely marred with tense changes and pointless errors. This one isn't so bad but it seems from poem to poem you fluctuate. Just wondering. Other than that good writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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very good one


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Brilliant! I loved the way in which the dialogue was filled with such wisdom and kindness, and the way in which the poem unravelled into a story. I want to know more about this poor stranger, he seems a wise man, good write
Redstripes

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