Two out of three ain't bad.

Two out of three ain't bad.

A Poem by Coyote Poetry
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Lonely are the people who wasted love and friendship.

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Two out of three ain't bad.










I was sitting alone in a Austin tavern in 1996.
Drinking long Island ice teas.
Trying to get blinded.

A old man dressed poorly ordered a water.
Bartender gave him a bad look and walked away.
I told the bartender.
"Give the old man what he wants."
The old man smiled.
Told the bartender.
"Same as my new friend."

He drank the Long Island ice tea quickly.
I ordered him another.
He thanks me.
Asked me.  "Was I alright?"

I told him.
"Not too good.
But I will be fine."

He touched my back.
Told me.
"You got two out of three.
Better then most of us."

He looked outside to the cold rainy night.
Told me.
"All three are hard to hold on to.
You got the booze. Number one.
You still got the road. Number two.
You still got a lot of living left."

"The third one ain't so easy.
Love cost a lot."

I bought another round.
He raised the Long Island.
Make a cheer to life.
"To the road.
To better days.
To good booze and wine.
To sweet woman lost on the road."

He smiled and told me "I was successful once.
I had the big house.
The beautiful wife waiting for me."

"I choose the booze.
I loved the road too much.
Now I sitting with you.
Alone and wishing I held on tighter."


I looked into his sad eyes.
Asked him. "What was really important?"

He smiled.
Told me to order him a double shot of whiskey.
I ordered the whiskey.
He drank in down quickly.

He whispers "Hold on, tightly and be thankful.
If you find the sweet woman.
Who loved you.
Hold on.
Nothing as sad as a old man dying alone."

I left him.
Gave him a few dollars.
Thanks him for the advice.


I learn two out of three isn't so good.
Need someone to love and care for you.



Before it is too late.



              Coyote 


             3 July 1996   

© 2011 Coyote Poetry



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I was sitting alone in a(n) Austin tavern. (When a is followed by a word started with a voel it becomes an)

A(n) old man dressed poorly ordered a water. (same deal as above)

Bartender gave him a bad look and walk(ed) away. (you switched tense in the middle of your sentence)

The old man smile(d). (same deal as above)

He thank(ed) me.
Ask(ed) me (if I) was I alright? (same as the last two)

He touche(d) my back. (^^)

th(a)n most of us. (then = time, than = comparison)


He look(ed) outside (tense issue again)

to the cold(,) rainy night.

Love cost(s) alot."

Ma(d)e a cheer to life. (tense again)

To sweet woman losts on the road. (no s on lost)

He smile(d) and told me

Now I('m) sitting with you. (you want I am sitting, not I sitting)

I look(ed) into his sad eyes. (tense again, but even in present no s on look)

He smile(d). (tense)

Thank(ed) him for the advice. (same as look)

learn(ed) two out of three isn't so good. (tense)

A few good lines in here. It didn't quite live up to my expectations based on the title, but only because I love the song too much

Posted 6 Years Ago


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You have such a kind heart, wisdom is found in surprising places.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Hello esteemed friend,

You write well.

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Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wonderful message in here Coyote. I loved how you brought it forth. I held the image in my mind as each word came forth.. You have such a wonderful gift in making one feel what you send forth.. This just was another of your true talents beaming through.

Mags xx

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice. You're extremely creative and I love the way you tell a story.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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This is a very beautiful write I enjoyed this. The title caught me because it reminded me of a song. This is wonderful i enjoyed this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What is it that makes us always peer hopefully into the horizon or wistfully behind us, but not intently into the here and now... We get so busy moving...planning...that we lose hold of what we already grasp...
A bird in the hand is better than two in the bush...an old adage...but wise...AND true...
Very nice poem...what's is sobering about it is that we all have one in us like it...
First poem of yours I've read...I think I'll read more...
Thanks

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That was beautiful...once again I feel every word! Great Job once again!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Reminds me of 60's Dylan. Thank you for writing this humbly sad piece. kudos.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Nicely penned tale-like poem full of meaning. Love is something we all need, I believe we all eventually find it.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Outstanding words here. Shows so many wise words. I like the story to this. Very well written.

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