A mad man prayer

A mad man prayer

A Poem by Coyote Poetry
"

Love can create a madness.

"
                              
                           A mad man prayer

I woke up with your name on my lips.

THE PHONE IS RINGING.

I dreamed you were calling me.
Bringing me into the heat of your flesh.
Calling my name.
Whispering words of love.

Sweet words.
Thanks for the education of the long ride.

I awake.
Sweating and full of hate.
Not wishing to touch you.
But to hurt you like you did to me.

I make plans to see you.
To find you.
Then the hate seem to fade away.

I pray to be able to fall into your arms.
For you to twist up my mind and heart again.

Make me your slave again.
I would serve you.
For you are what I need.

I fall asleep again.
You come into my dreams.
You are so beautiful.
So sweet and innocence looking.

THE PHONE IS STILL RINGING>

I see myself.
Being drowned in cement till I'm buried.
Unable to breath.
I won't cry out for help. I will watch you pour the last of the cement.

I will wait for my last breath.
You give me a demon smile.
Raise your hands.
 The cement open up for you.

You tell me.
You will not die.
I'm your punishment.

You ran away from everyone.
I'm your time in hell for being a b*****d.

You will be my fool.
I will hold you as a prisoner till only a flicker
of emotion is left.

You will live till you only wish will be a trip into hell.

THE PHONE IS RINGING

I awake and I answer the phone.
I hear a sweet voice.

You whisper. Come to me now.

                          Coyote
                        1996

© 2010 Coyote Poetry



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Coyote Poetry
A old poem. Any errors. Please assist. Never too old to learn.

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Then the hate seem to fade away.
Then the hate seems to fade away (present tense)

So sweet and innocence looking.
So sweet and innocent looking. (innocent is an adjective, innocence is a noun. You want the adjective)

Unable to breath.
Unable to breathe. (breathe is the verb, breath is the noun)

The cement open up for you.
The cement opens up for you (present tense again)

You seem to have a reccuring tense issue in you poetry, I'm not sure if it's because english is not you first language, or if it is, maybe you should reread it really closely. Either way hopefully this will help. This course is worth checking out:
http://www.writerscafe.org/courses/Lessons-In-Basic-English/880/Lesson-One%3A-Verb-Tenses/883/

I think this is a really cute little poem. The longer lines break up the flow a little bit, it might be worth breaking those up. I really like the theme of the poem though. Good job.

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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This was a great but sad poem, full of emotions of love, hate, dispare, and of course being tired.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

This was real life for me once. Loving someone who could not love. A dangerous place to be. Thank yo.. read more
Mad man for sure.

Goodness! Someone get that annoying phone!!!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I was in this place a few time. Whiskey wishes will break your heart. Some people have a hold on you.. read more
Funny how we soon forget all of the ill feelings when we hear their voice. Kathie

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are right. Sweet voice can make us forget for a second. Thank you dear Kathie for reading and th.. read more
Wow.
So many emotions all put down so beautifully.
Love can cause madness! Sheer madness! And this is one of the best poems about love i have read in a long time.
Simply stunning.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

An excellent poem. A timeless one at that.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh Coyote.. This is stunning...

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was realy good, the way it captured the emotions and their love/hate angst. It rang so true. The last line was a wonderful ending. Brilliant.

Posted 5 Years Ago


perfect.I love the influence your words have on me

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Then the hate seem to fade away.
Then the hate seems to fade away (present tense)

So sweet and innocence looking.
So sweet and innocent looking. (innocent is an adjective, innocence is a noun. You want the adjective)

Unable to breath.
Unable to breathe. (breathe is the verb, breath is the noun)

The cement open up for you.
The cement opens up for you (present tense again)

You seem to have a reccuring tense issue in you poetry, I'm not sure if it's because english is not you first language, or if it is, maybe you should reread it really closely. Either way hopefully this will help. This course is worth checking out:
http://www.writerscafe.org/courses/Lessons-In-Basic-English/880/Lesson-One%3A-Verb-Tenses/883/

I think this is a really cute little poem. The longer lines break up the flow a little bit, it might be worth breaking those up. I really like the theme of the poem though. Good job.

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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