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Compartment 114
Compartment 114
Broken

Broken

A Poem by Carolann Dowsett

Like a dagger 
pain cuts 
through my heart 
Love fails 
once again to start 

Too many things 
get in the way 
Misconstrued 
the words I say 

An open wound 
bleeds into my soul 
Broken pieces 
that can never be whole 

Tears fall 
in a cascade of suffering 
Damaged goods 
not worth recovering 

If you see me 
just look away 
I'm not worth knowing 
I'll just cause you pain 

I'm broken inside 
there's no hope for me 
Too much damage was done 
I'll never be free 

© 2013 Carolann Dowsett


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I find this very emotional and sad. You sound very defeated, resigned like you have given up, which is sad and not your decision to make, I mean come on you just can't opt out, can you? I feel like a Samaritan talking to a suicidal person, I wouldn't be much good, there figures would be horrendous :-)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much that makes me happy. Yes it does help a lot, purges the pain off my soul.
Leigh

11 Years Ago

Oh good, I am pleased too, I have used my poetry to help me deal with the death of others, I find it.. read more
Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much and you do the same :-)



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I find this very emotional and sad. You sound very defeated, resigned like you have given up, which is sad and not your decision to make, I mean come on you just can't opt out, can you? I feel like a Samaritan talking to a suicidal person, I wouldn't be much good, there figures would be horrendous :-)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much that makes me happy. Yes it does help a lot, purges the pain off my soul.
Leigh

11 Years Ago

Oh good, I am pleased too, I have used my poetry to help me deal with the death of others, I find it.. read more
Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much and you do the same :-)
strong read. great work :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
You've captured a tortured soul, a broken being really well through this piece. Very good word choice. You're an amazing poet.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
I can truly relate this in the real world, as I went through it with a woman I once loved. Although, it happened a long time ago, I have learned that sometimes a ruptured heart is sometimes a good thing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Well it certainly makes you feel and you know you are alive even if it is in misery.
Written Volumes

11 Years Ago

I am grateful to be alive. But not in misery no longer. :)

Benjamin
Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

That's good :)
Love how this poem flows, its sad too when you put
"I'm broken inside
there's no hope for me
Too much damage was done
I'll never be free"
Feels like me sometimes, but its amazing though

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
i loveee the word cascading for some reason.
A good poem about the hopelessness of the fear of never finding love, if that makes sense...ive been up for a long time so i apologize if that makes no sense...but a dark and lovely poem none the less. =)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much. :)
It is sad when we fall into sadness.
"If you see me
just look away
I'm not worth knowing
I'll just cause you pain"
I have known many people who gave up. Took years to come alive again. I tell the young folks. Learn from mistakes and be wiser. The poem told a sad tale with a lonely ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you.
i have also felt this...no hope for me, i am not worth it, stay away from me you will be better off...ah yes.

like plath said..."readers want to know from someone who has been there and felt the worst."

your writes are very expressive.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
You've written well. I hesitate to write about its content. So ignore me if this sounds too personal. No one should ever lead you to feel unworthy. It is one thing to feel sorrow at the loss of love, or a breakup. However, do not carry that loss so deeply as to allow yourself to feel unworthy. You are worth knowing, thriving, loving, and so much more. I tell my daughter this, as so many girls lean toward how others see them for their own self image and self worth. No one can take that away from you. Believe in yourself, love yourself, and as to the rest of the story - it is their loss. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much. Yes what you say is very true.
Aw man this is really sad. I believe you probably are very worthy of knowing, at least the subject of this ditty is. again a great rhythm and wording. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much.

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Carolann Dowsett
Carolann Dowsett

Copacabana, NSW, Australia



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