Revelation

Revelation

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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It seems I have been asleep forever, my eyes have been closed for numerous ages........

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Hello my sweet friend.
It seems I have been asleep forever.
My eyes have been closed for numerous ages
And have not seen your heart.

Your heart is so bright and achingly beautiful
That I must go back to sleep
And turn away as to continue looking
Could pull me into places I am afraid to go.

I have seen you with my eyes closed
As you are in front of me.
Yet I have not seen you as you truly are
With my eyes and heart wide open.

This revelation strikes chords in my soul
That I never knew existed.
How could I have been so blind?

I must take leave of your heart's beauty
And find refuge in my sleep
As remaining here in this revelation
May change my destiny in such ways
As I am not prepared to see.

 

© 2012 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Artist Jia Lu

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This come across as a modern story of the beauty and the beast. The 3rd stanza alone speaks so true about this,
"I have seen you with my eyes closed
As you are in front of me.
Yet I have not seen you as you truly are
With my eyes and heart wide open." - She knows he exists, but she doesn't know the real him.

Nicely done :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

That_Girl

11 Years Ago

I agree with what you said completely. I had very similar thoughts. :)



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The depth in this poem is spectacular, lovely piece of writing!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Stunning - breathtaking - A great poem, as usual :)

Posted 11 Years Ago



We all see what we want to see... and perhaps are a little frightened of seeing anything other than that.

Revelations can be scary and life changing, but ... we can't remain asleep can we? :)

Great write, thought provoking... is this something you wrote awhile ago? It feels different than your other work.


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a very beautifully written piece Neva... Often reality turns out to be different from our notions of perfectness and it has the power to challenge and change our beliefs in a quite subconscious way... I find similar reflections in your poem.. very well composed; i loved it :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


sosmetimes we think just because we've known a person for so long that we truly know that person inside out. That's not always the case right Neva? :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I must take leave of your heart's beauty
And find refuge in my sleep
As remaining here in this revelation
May change my destiny in such ways
As I am not prepared to see.

We are never prepared to see the reality that trips us with blind and accurate precision.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I feel it is about self, not quite ready to embrace the real you. Whether it is or not, beautifully written, Neva. Namaste

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well thought out.. The imagination can do amazing things :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


As always, Neva, stunning in its beauty. It took my breath away. My reading of it wasn't that of beauty + the beast, but a person realising for the first time that they loved someone, and afraid of the consequences that might flow-perhaps she is married to someone else, or there is some other impediment to their love.
Thank tyou so much for sharing this beautiful piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on June 24, 2010
Last Updated on September 1, 2012
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