Whisper to Me - Remarkable Words

Whisper to Me - Remarkable Words

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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I want to still hear your voice echoing against my skin................

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Come whisper to me, remarkable words

When evening cascades to a sigh
I want to still hear your voice
Echoing against my skin
After I kiss you
Goodnight

Encircle my world with the sound of your thunder
Listen to my pulse throb as it resounds
You can measure each beat
Matched with your own
In the way you make
My heart pound

Place your hands on the small of my back once more
Leave me with your calm and serene air
So tonight when I lie down alone
And close these eyes
I can still feel
You there

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm



Author's Note

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
When you say goodnight, I want to remember you as if you were still here.

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I like this poem, I like the descending structure of each stanza, every line by at most two words than the last line. The message of love resonates on two levels for me, the passion for the mate in our lives and the passion of the subject we love (for me that is mathematics, hence why I love the structuring). Resonant on the deep.

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precious poem with a tremendous flow the structure you have chosen works perfectly another profound write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Great write.

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indeed, remarkable, well done

Posted 6 Years Ago


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ah the small of the back for a woman of sensitivity...most eroticly spoken and penned

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

oh such beautifully soothing piece...you make your words sing...stunning..

Encircle my world with the sound of your thunder
Listen to my pulse throb as it resounds

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

if there be love , let it shine with the glow of sincerity , in words , in touch

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

great style, structure and substance..
The poem was good too :)
allen

Posted 6 Years Ago


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This one is gorgeous! The depth of it moves through the whole piece, and the way the woman remembers her lover (if I'm interpreting it correctly) is perfect in its subtlety. The beauty of this poem is restrained--like a rose that gets more beautiful every time you look at it. I wish I could comment well on relationship/romance stuff, but romance has never come easy for me--but this poem is still beautiful. Nice work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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With words such as yours love, I truly would think they would linger long after sleep has lulled! Beautiful, as ever! xx

Posted 6 Years Ago


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first...the picture is magnificent...it goes perfectly with the poem!
then, the poem's regular pattern makes it smooth to read and the flow reminds me of a silent night where the loved one is there...
the feelings are almost tangible...which is wow!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Added on May 21, 2011
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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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