Steam - Respite In the Essence of Air

Steam - Respite In the Essence of Air

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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She watches in pleasure as you push away all............

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She filled your air pretending to be life-giving water

Now you know that she is fire
Clouding your vision of the world around you
She traded your dreams for her desires

She watched with pleasure as you pushed away all
To give her your undivided attention
Finding fault in every move that you made
Leaving you with no honorable mention

Her warmth and beauty holds you under her spell
Stubbornly calling your thirst benign
For what now seems like forever a day and a year
Yet,  of her life-giving water there is no sign

Now you find yourself longingly staring into the air
Seeking a tall cool glass of respite
To quench your thirst and refresh your dry spirit
Restoring your dreams to your sight

Continue seeking life-giving water with great patience
Breathe in with the utmost vigilant care
In a vessel of a warrior fearless and wise
You will find respite…………
In the essence of air

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm



Author's Note

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
not everything that is beautiful to the eye has your best interest at heart

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Ahhh... Such a powerful message in this one Neva; one we would all do well to learn. All that sparkles is certainly not gold. You wrote this with such a perfect portrayal from the Vileness' perspective. I could almost here her utter "Muahahaha" under her breath as she bleed him dry; even taking great joy as he forsake all else for her emptiness.
Brilliant!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

4 Years Ago

Thank you Veronica, I had forgotten about this one
Veronica Chandler

4 Years Ago

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Very nice work! The poem breathes so much truth and meaning.
100/100

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

4 Years Ago

Thank you! :)
Indeed that is very true Neva. "The Devils greatest trick was convincing the world that he doesn't exist...! Be fooled by him if you wish but I can tell that you, like me, are not fooled. You posses a wisdom beyond your years. Your grasp of certain subject matter is nothing if not elegant and refined. "You will find respite in the essence of the air" Excellent poetry Neva...!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ahhh... Such a powerful message in this one Neva; one we would all do well to learn. All that sparkles is certainly not gold. You wrote this with such a perfect portrayal from the Vileness' perspective. I could almost here her utter "Muahahaha" under her breath as she bleed him dry; even taking great joy as he forsake all else for her emptiness.
Brilliant!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

4 Years Ago

Thank you Veronica, I had forgotten about this one
Veronica Chandler

4 Years Ago

I am reviewing from the last page of my RR's to current, unless something on the live feed grabs my .. read more
The drive to pursue is stronger than any anticipation of pain.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the imagery, movement and play with elements created a beautiful piece - air is a perfect element to show the need and the suffocation - immeasurable to the naked eye but we are always consumed through it.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A vixen who steams the breath of desire with her cunning beauty, only to dry the air and leave it cold and dark. She suffocates her wayward warrior with a lonely pillow devoid of life and her. The essence of air is not enough for the spirit. Moisture withheld, the wayward warrior moves on to atmospheres that offer the water-laden breath of life.

Excellent writing, again, sweet Neva.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amazing write one of my favorites of yours this one really hits home with me

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

and not everything that is not beautiful to the eye has your best interest at heart. i so love coming around here and reading you. never disappointing and always thought provoking. excellent write!!! def a fav now

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Part observation, part subtle warning of what can and does happen to the ill-prepared. Superb word-weaving Neva.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Deep profound poetry and so well expressed, not all paths are paved with good intentions, fatal attraction! Wonderful work as always. David

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Added on June 11, 2011
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