Imperfect Creatures

Imperfect Creatures

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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faces of men whisper of experience between ideas that come undone............

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The spinning of the Earth is never interrupted
for anyone.  
Although, faces of men whisper of experience
between ideas that come undone.

Deep questions slide into all we know to be,
step right in.
Yet, we do not hesitate to look away,
when their hours begin.

Looking back at the summer of our lives,
were we supposed to hold hands?
Perhaps we never tried, or merely gave up
in the end.

Just another minute or two tries not too smile
when reading what’s been said.
We wait for justice, and then roll over
playing dead.

Settling in, we do not mention lessons
learned from each moment.
Is this not a step towards
what lies underneath our torment?

Are we running out of time and a foot behind,
because we do not care?
Do we only commit to that which comforts
our own air?

Sometimes I doubt if we closed our eyes for a second
we would see the entire picture,
perhaps because, we refuse to see ourselves
as we are,
Imperfect Creatures.

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm



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This Poem is very beautiful. The author undoubtedly is aware that all humans are imperfect creatures. They wouldn't be human if they were perfect,because our imperfections is what make us humans The sixth and seventh stanzas hit home for me

Are we running out of time and a foot behind,
because we do not care?
Do we only commit to that which comforts
our own air?

Sometimes I doubt if we closed our eyes for a second
we would see the entire picture
perhaps because,we refuse to see ourselves
as we are,
Imperfect Creatures

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I will not delve into pointless banter and glorification of your poem, yet, I will say: This work spoke to me deeply, affirmed my similar suspicions and gave a great imagery in your path to enlightenment on the subject.
Thanks for being a writer!


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That's amazing I love the poem. I think it is wonderful!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

these words are powerful. i myself have used up time waiting for justice. but we cant give up,searching for ourselves, or the wisdom that shows us the way. does anyone really want to see the truth? ..... i do.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wise words, Neva. Loved this piece. Great write!


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Sometimes I doubt if we closed our eyes for a second
we would see the entire picture,
perhaps because, we refuse to see ourselves
as we are,
Imperfect Creatures."

Best and wisest line in thiis poem!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tight structure and smooth flow particularly liked last two stanzas very true. good write thanks Neva

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow. This goes straight into my favourites. I've always been awed by writers who can say so much in such perfect rhythm and rhyme. Your poem does that. Outstanding poem. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


you have an etheral voice, i love the title, the message neva...i am just in awe...

Posted 6 Years Ago


That's right we always have to a maintain our humbleness
because we are all imperfect creatures.
I love the mood and the message of this poem.
Sounds like a relationship that's rocky at
times, as most relationships are.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Indeed my darling, aren't we all mere Imperfect creatures, yet another dazzaling performance Neva, well done, great read.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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