In the Shadows of Wanting More

In the Shadows of Wanting More

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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A path to evening drops into life like a maze full of sin.

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A path to evening drops into life
like a maze full of sin.
Complete with smiles
no poet can divide.
Protection from the air is grim
same as a marriage
woven in a mist
of distrust and lies.

A sad, sad spell enchants your hands
when you lie naked
in the shadows of wanting more.
You cannot help but wonder
if this means
you are dead to the skies
lying between anguish
and the path to evening, keeping score.

Your feet fill in the gaps
saying farewell to sacrifice
when midnight strikes
yet does not save you again.
You cannot walk the path to evening
if you do not know
your way out
of the maze full of sin.

© 2012 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm



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Through the entire reading of this work, I was trying if not struggling to remember a song from the 90's. The beginning made me think of a piano solo, thankfully I was able to remember the song. But to read something and remember a song from the mid 90's.....well that just about takes the cake in my book.


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lAHbZsg95M0

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Lovely and old-fashion, in a good way though! Very well-written also!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Through the entire reading of this work, I was trying if not struggling to remember a song from the 90's. The beginning made me think of a piano solo, thankfully I was able to remember the song. But to read something and remember a song from the mid 90's.....well that just about takes the cake in my book.


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lAHbZsg95M0

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A beautifully written sad piece for love. Nicely done!

~Anna Rose


Posted 5 Years Ago


"A sad, sad spell enchants your hands
when you lie naked
in the shadows of wanting more."

Such a lovely descriptive, Neva! Simply beautiful ...


My best,
Kelly

Posted 5 Years Ago


A beautiful piece. I love your style; your word choice is always so lyrical, so smooth. Just lovely.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Forgiveness is the path, Love is the way. There is no separation.

Posted 5 Years Ago


A path to evening drops into life
like a maze full of sin.
Complete with smiles
no poet can divide.
Protection from the air is grim
same as a marriage
woven in a mist
of distrust and lies.

Awesome poem:-)


Posted 5 Years Ago


Beautifully written, I would love to write my favorite line, but I can't each stanza is so breathtaking I can't pick just one stanza.
100/100

Posted 5 Years Ago


Very sad...

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

To pretend everything is fine in a failing relationship can only last so long and increase the pain and heartache... a wonderful write for such a sad topic.

Posted 5 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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Added on January 19, 2012
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Tags: score, sin, skies, sad, feet, shadows, maze, evening

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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