Southern Love

Southern Love

A Poem by Fabian G. Franklin
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Where I'm From...

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I love a southern summer night

Fireflies blinking signal lights

Sitting on the wrap-around porch

Listening to the old folk’s stories

Honeysuckle smell; late afternoon

Drifting beneath the yellow moon

I love dirt roads and country streams

Cool cotton sheets and summer dreams

Spanish moss; magnolia blossoms

Evening visits from coons and possums

I love the taste of sweet iced tea

Spicy fruits from persimmon tree

Blackberry cobbler and rhubarb pie

And stars that fill the southern sky

I love waking to the sacred quiet

To find the earth all covered in white

Squirrels scampering with chestnut treasures

These, but a few of my winter pleasures

The rabbits that track through fallen snow

Christmas memories from long ago

With nuts and candy and going to sleep

Under patchwork quilts stacked three deep

Waking up on Christmas morn

To celebrate a savior born

In a barn on the hay; God’s pride and joy

They say that Jesus was a country boy

I love autumn hours round the woodstove

The bright oak embers as they glow

Grandma’s lap and her rocking chair

Both of us wrapped in her blanket there

I love the farms, I love the people

The southern charm of a white church steeple

Parishioners, penitent for their wrongs

Praise, giving thanks and singing songs

Passed down to us from way back when

Is any sweeter than a Baptist hymn?

I love the daffodils of spring

The thrill of hearing a whippoorwill sing

That brings to mind the simple joy

Of being a southern country boy

Strangers waving as they drive by

Honest handshakes that do not lie

Fishing poles, shotguns, bluegrass tunes

Walking with sweethearts under the moon

The satisfaction of a job well done

The spoken love of father for son

Saying, “Open your heart and close your mouth.”

I’m proud to be a son of the south.

 

 


© 2017 Fabian G. Franklin



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I love how you engage all the senses of the reader with the enriching sights, smells, tastes and warmth of the country life. It is difficult to achieve a poem which pays such attention to little things. And it is these details that make the whole picture come alive. There are so many things a person can say about the country, that the things that he does choose to point out become the markers of his level of writing. You manage to include all the things that make countrylife different from the polluted cities, whilst maintaining a balance between details you provide and the reader's own imagination...

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fabian G. Franklin

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and your kind comment. Bless.



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I'm in Floridaand in the burbs but Southerners have a calm beauty in their spirit...a far cry from microwave new Englanders...
Nothing beats loving the life around you and giving God a nod for all the nuances...
I'm in building a Tiny house in the next few when I retire...got to find a spot of sacred land to put it on...not sure where...then its just...me my dog..a small deck..a place to create a bit of art...a garden...and some chickens


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Fabian G. Franklin

2 Weeks Ago

It sounds wonderful. I don't suppose I'll ever be able to retire. I'm not allowed to grow old or get.. read more
J. Hampton

2 Weeks Ago

I'm retiring in the mainstream sense...to see what the Lord has planned for me to ...the work never .. read more
I love how you engage all the senses of the reader with the enriching sights, smells, tastes and warmth of the country life. It is difficult to achieve a poem which pays such attention to little things. And it is these details that make the whole picture come alive. There are so many things a person can say about the country, that the things that he does choose to point out become the markers of his level of writing. You manage to include all the things that make countrylife different from the polluted cities, whilst maintaining a balance between details you provide and the reader's own imagination...

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fabian G. Franklin

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and your kind comment. Bless.
well done sir! though my heritage is not from the South ..i felt and pictured each line ... the good things in life center around family .. taking time .. being honest and loyal and proud .. what a fine prelude to Thanksgiving this poem is .. so appreciative that i did not miss it!
E.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Fabian G. Franklin

3 Weeks Ago

Well, thank you my friend, for stopping by to read. This site has become like an extended family to .. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

yes...me too ...i have enjoyed all my time here at the cafe ..i think i have learned so much ... so .. read more
Absolutely love this, Fabian.

The rhythm, the diction, imagery, flow

how it moves through the season, woods, roads, churches...

It's very all-encompassing, and even makes a city slicker like me long to escape the rat race, smog and traffic.

This reminded me a bit of my childhood in Texas where my uncle his cowboy hat used to put me on his lap so I can drive his truck.

We would pass by ppl and wave.

Imagine that now - or in the city? A 4 yr old driving a truck lol

You're attention to detail was superb.

Magnolias, persimmon tree, whippoorwill, rhubarb, daffodils...

You engage all the senses

And I love how you end it "open your heart and close your mouth"

A true country proverb.

This strikes me as Frost-ian, and homage to the country.

Few small things though, as always feel free to ignore.

You can, and I'm sure you know, break this up into couplets.

Might be easier on the reader.

As is, it feels a lil dense, esp for the relaxed subject matter.

If not couplets, then there seems to be natural transitions, like when you transition to winter

"I love waking to the country quiet.."

Could break it up in two there if you want.

Another thing, could use another adjective instead of 'country' in "country streams"

The whole thing is country, also, you use it elsewhere.

Anyways, just two small suggestions.

Enjoyed reading this.













Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fabian G. Franklin

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you my friend. There is a repetition in the scheme of southern and country...perhaps a bit mor.. read more

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