Empty Hole

Empty Hole

A Poem by FrikinFrancesca
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I heard a song and it made sense to me, it really hit home and this poem and focused around how I feel about certain things along with the emotion of the song.

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My heart isn't here anymore.
Can you see the hole in my chest?
The place where something should be.

I think it shattered,
I think it broke.
Maybe it disappeared,
If you choose to peer,
You'll see the reasons why.

Something happened,
Something you can't erase
or forget.
This unforgettable memory, fresh in my mind.
It caused the collapse.
It's what caused the void.
Do you see it now?
The reasons behind it?
I'm fueled by what it use to be,
Now it's gone, empty and abandoned.

Can you feel my heart beating?
Can you feel my pulse?
No, you can't.
It's obvious isn't it?
You took the missing piece with you.
The thing that will complete the hole in my chest.
I wonder if I'll ever feel that warm feeling again.
It's to late though.
My hearts not beating.
It's not even there no more.
It dried out.
It died.

© 2009 FrikinFrancesca



Author's Note

FrikinFrancesca
Ignore grammar problems. :l
Also, if it doesn't sound very good, I kind of rushed through it, so sorry.

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You can definitely tell this poem was based around a song. The rhythm and pace of it almost makes the poem seems like lyrics.

Brilliant imagery and emotion runs through this piece-you should be proud of it. Anyone who has suffered a broken heart can relate, and it's always good for poetry to be able to reach other people and grab their attention and emotions. You've definitely done it with this piece; thoroughly enjoyed it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.



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For rushing through it, like you say, I think it's amazing. It really catches the emotion and I know the feeling of missing pieces. This poem is really deep, and honestly? I have nothing negative to say about it at all!

Posted 5 Years Ago


I could feel the heartache..brilliant !

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

WOW! this is powerful and deep.
I enjoyed this alot. Very well written as well.
You are very talented.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You can definitely tell this poem was based around a song. The rhythm and pace of it almost makes the poem seems like lyrics.

Brilliant imagery and emotion runs through this piece-you should be proud of it. Anyone who has suffered a broken heart can relate, and it's always good for poetry to be able to reach other people and grab their attention and emotions. You've definitely done it with this piece; thoroughly enjoyed it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

i like this one alot very deep piece... lots of emotion in this title the title completes the piece perfectly... overall nice job on this..

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on December 22, 2009
Last Updated on December 23, 2009
Tags: Empty, Hole, Personal, Poem, Poetry, Music, Love, Heart broken, People, Dark
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