Empty Hole

Empty Hole

A Poem by FrikinFrancesca
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I heard a song and it made sense to me, it really hit home and this poem and focused around how I feel about certain things along with the emotion of the song.

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My heart isn't here anymore.
Can you see the hole in my chest?
The place where something should be.

I think it shattered,
I think it broke.
Maybe it disappeared,
If you choose to peer,
You'll see the reasons why.

Something happened,
Something you can't erase
or forget.
This unforgettable memory, fresh in my mind.
It caused the collapse.
It's what caused the void.
Do you see it now?
The reasons behind it?
I'm fueled by what it use to be,
Now it's gone, empty and abandoned.

Can you feel my heart beating?
Can you feel my pulse?
No, you can't.
It's obvious isn't it?
You took the missing piece with you.
The thing that will complete the hole in my chest.
I wonder if I'll ever feel that warm feeling again.
It's to late though.
My hearts not beating.
It's not even there no more.
It dried out.
It died.

© 2009 FrikinFrancesca



Author's Note

FrikinFrancesca
Ignore grammer problems. :l
Also, if it doesn't sound very good, I kind of rushed through it, so sorry.



Featured Review

You can definitely tell this poem was based around a song. The rhythm and pace of it almost makes the poem seems like lyrics.

Brilliant imagery and emotion runs through this piece-you should be proud of it. Anyone who has suffered a broken heart can relate, and it's always good for poetry to be able to reach other people and grab their attention and emotions. You've definitely done it with this piece; thoroughly enjoyed it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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I like it makes me think back on some things that happened in my life and made me feel empty. Great writting, keep it up

Posted 8 Months Ago


This poem has evoked some personl feelings too.Even though there is no much feeling of continuation in between, it still managed to make me read the entire poem.

Posted 11 Months Ago


The emotion throughout this poem is beautiful.

Posted 11 Months Ago


I actually love he idea that you based this off a song you heard, such beautiful art you've created! Such a sad, longing feeling when you feel so empty after someone left...constantly asking yourself if you're still alive, or why. We can't live based on how others may leave us, we can only grow. It takes a lot of time to put yourself back together sometimes...it took me a long time to allow myself to be okay with feeling how I do sometimes...I enjoyed the sad, desperate feelings you conveyed. Lovely write!

Posted 1 Year Ago


I like the the overall idea which you presented in this poem. There is a lot of expression within this piece which is truly memorizing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Nice poem, could do a bit of cleaning up. Looking foward to your other poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


I love the expression of self here. it shows true emotion. I can see you really put yourself into this. i can see you have a passion for writing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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MJ
I loved reading this honestly. I think it captured a ton of emotion and the imagery is amazing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


I liked reading this poem & the wordings are quite good is well

Posted 2 Years Ago


I enjoyed the use of your word 'fueled'.

Posted 2 Years Ago



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Added on December 22, 2009
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Tags: Empty, Hole, Personal, Poem, Poetry, Music, Love, Heart broken, People, Dark


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