Our State of Mind

Our State of Mind 

The reasons that we find

To change our state of mind

A love so hard to find

Our dreams just left behind

The amazing times we had

Will forever outweigh the bad

I know mistakes were made

But forgiveness is the way

The key to really find

Our honest state of mind

My darlin we’ve been through

The hardest painful times

Were life and death was with us

And forever on our minds

But love prevailed and helped us find

An appreciation now left behind

The things we say but never mean

My life’s become a twisted dream

I nightmare that is here to stay

Never fade or go away

No matter my angel how hard we try

Our loves eternal, it will never die

I’ve tried so hard to forget the times

To block out the love we left behind

You know for a fact the things you do

The hurt I feel from words untrue

Apologies you make so honest and true

But you take them back and leave me blue

The second that you get your way

The things you want and say you crave

You change your mind like a cruel jape

Them I’m to blame for all mistakes

The things we feel but try to hide

I know to well your state of mind

My heart forever belongs to you

But battered and broken from things you do

The things you say and never mean

My soul is lost like all our dreams

I hope you know that in my mind

Forever you’ll be my best of times

My only wish is to go back in time

To say the things we felt inside

To keep the dreams we left behind

To change our broken state of mind

The things you take to ease the pain

To forget our love and run away

It’s a vicious circle we’ve lived before

That only leads to wanting more

I know you’ll only realise

The damage done when theirs no disguise

Your beauties like an angel

Sent down from the sky

But the demons that we lost together

Are growing back inside

They’re only going to send 

You back into that time

To all the things you didn’t want

You overcame with strength and love

You will lose your heart, mind and soul

A love again you will never know

 

 By Chris Atkinson 

Reviews

[Pure Innocence]

This is really an amazing piece. I can feel your heart and emotion pouring out. Amazing job! Again after reading your story I love being able to compare what the story was saying to what you write in your poetry. I love how you take hardships that have happened in your life and create this beautiful piece. Seriously awesome job.

[Chris Atkinson]

Thank you so much for your kind words and review, I realy apriciate it. I am realy happy you enjoyed it. Thanks again :)

[sonnie ibadah]

very nice flow, i enjoyed reading this one

[Chris Atkinson]

Thanks for your review Sonnie, they are always realy apriciated. I am glad you enjoyed it

[Emily]

I love your wording! Well done.

[Chris Atkinson]

Thanks very much for your review Emily, glad you enjoyed it

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Beautifully penned thank you for
sharing your memories and thoughts.



My life’s become a twisted dream

I nightmare that is here to stay

Never fade or go away




Did you mean A nightmare or I nightmare

but I really loved this piece nice work.



Beautiful stanza's lines here.




Your beauties like an angel

Sent down from the sky

But the demons that we lost together

Are growing back inside

They’re only going to send

You back into that time

To all the things you didn’t want

You overcame with strength and love

You will lose your heart, mind and soul

A love again you will never know




this is my other review I promised.


I enjoyed this read.



Blessings. kindred poet

[Chris Atkinson]

Thanks very much for your review Kindred poet, and yes I did mean A nightmare ha, I will have to edit that line. Thank you for noticeing it. Thanks again for your reviews, they are much apriciated.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

you're quite welcome. it's my pleasure. blessings. kindred poet

[Nusquam Esse]

I have always been biased towards traditional poetry, with its rhyme and meter; so I of course favor this one. All the components are solid and well done, a few of the rhymes feel a bit contrived, but this is not 'in your face'. Perhaps it could be improved with a somewhat more creative rhyme scheme, since the individual rhymes are just fine. (splitting up some of the longer sequences, with a more traditional sonnet alternating format ABABBA, rather than sticking to AAABBB) Just my suggestions, but this is great as is.

[Chris Atkinson]

Thanks for your review, its much apriciated

[Tina Louise UK]

A stirring heartfelt piece. You expressed yourself so wonderfully here :) x

[Chris Atkinson]

Thanks very much Tia, your words are greatly appreciated x