My Heart

My heart has been broken but it is mending, my heart has been bleeding but not as bad, my heard has cried its last tear but there is still more, my heart said it can’t take anymore but it keeps taking it, my heart wants to give in but I keep pushing it, my heart cries for this to go away but it never does.

Reviews

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

I like your use of enjambment (hope I've spelled it right) here and how you've broken it up with commas rather than using new sentances, it makes this flow better. It also convays the emotion felt when writing this better than what it would have, had it been broken up differantly. Good job

[~ Otto Girl ~]

nice work. i like how you say my heart cries for this to go away but it never does. nice emtion.