Sin

Sin

A Poem by ckane

Dance with the devil tonight I will
Without crime, but with sin and anticipating thrill

We will dance the dance of enchanted bliss
No feelings, no love, no want for a kiss

Without want, or need, just lusted wonder
Stars will move and heaven will thunder

Searing, jeering, thoughts of disgust
Dance with the devil tonight I must.

© 2016 ckane



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I am absolutely dying to write music to this. It's dark, whimsical, sexy. The length is perfect and your stanzas are effective and punchy. Your rhyming isn't self-indulgent, and your phrasing isn't recycled. Thank you for this. Your work is emotional and stunning.

Posted 1 Month Ago


ckane

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much for that review it's after seriously making my evening.! I'm going to print it and.. read more
You are really talented with words

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ckane

3 Months Ago

Gosh thank you so much. I don't know about talented but I like to try! 😀
you express that dark pull so well.....we know we should not, and we even hear our minds say so, and offer reasons not to, but there we go again....

Somehow this reminds me of a Leonard Cohen's song, "Dance me, to the end of love".

Posted 2 Years Ago


Dance with the Devil is such an evocative phrase and well chosen. You hint and tantalise at many things allowing the reader to interpret the meaning anyway they want.

A wonderful read as enigmatic as the title.

Good stuff!

Posted 2 Years Ago


It was good for me in reading.
No feelings, no love, no want for a kiss
i loved with this sentence.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Sounds like you'll be doing more than dancing! ... and remember ... the Devil plays for keeps!

Posted 2 Years Ago


awwww!! i loved it.... a lovely thought out piece.... dancing with a devil is a mysterious experience....that devil must be sweet though.... brilliant work dear frnd... full ratings.....

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ckane

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much, really appreciate it. 😘
I must say this had some power behind it. You held a metaphoric meaning and I liked that and some rhyme as well. Great work:)

Posted 2 Years Ago


ckane

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much. And yes the hidden message behind this poem, I hope, can be translated to anyone .. read more
??????

2 Years Ago

Your very welcome and yes we are none are perfect!
Ah, to live a life of wanton abandonment. To grab hold of the immediate and the spontaneous. To live for the moment without a care for the consequences.

I'll have to pencil that in my calendar.

Posted 2 Years Ago


This is really quite the clever piece. Written as an isolated incident (possibly in one's weakness) in appearance, but speaks of a woman's universal ... need/desire/habitual dance/temporary insanity ...take your pick.

Thanks for the share.

Posted 2 Years Ago


ckane

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much, I really appreciate it. And I appreciate your understanding of the poem. It is, i.. read more

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ckane

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