The Pause to My Pivot

The Pause to My Pivot

A Poem by Cobblestone Traveler
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The frustration that comes with the paralysis of your senses.

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The dawn is approaching 
And I know I'm not your sun
I attempt to turn around

I'm paused in time
Yet you're not mine

If I could retrieve my breath
Out of your clasped hands
Maybe then I could walk away

I try to block your gales
My function fails

I could take a match
Ignite the string between us
And give a final sigh

But not before my fingers trace
Across your face

© 2016 Cobblestone Traveler


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I sense a little violence in this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

7 Years Ago

Thanks for your review. There is definitely a little desperation to break the magnetism and it can b.. read more
The idea of extinguishing something so alive
One wonders if its right
or pure murder
I enjoyed reading this

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

7 Years Ago

I find your perspective fascinating. Thanks so much for reading.
Even when you know the relationship is one-sided, it is difficult to walk away. The strong emotions come through. Well written. LydI**

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

7 Years Ago

Thank you! I appreciate your review.
I so understand your reluctance to turn away. Finding a reason, any reason to linger.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

7 Years Ago

Precisely. Thank you for your observant review. :)
I like the stopping and starting with the different rhythms. The feeling of a machine working perfectly then stalling. Makes it very interesting to read. Fab job. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

7 Years Ago

I appreciate hearing your perspective! Thank you so much.
Beautiful. First two lines are golden. But loved the whole poesy. :) Tyfs

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

7 Years Ago

That means a lot to me, thank you!
Cyprian Van Dyke

7 Years Ago

You're very welcome!

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Added on June 11, 2016
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Tags: love, pain, separation, attraction, pivot, stuck