schizo

a schizophrenic professes his love.

give me a minute
to tell you i love you,
and it'll turn into a year.

               give me your life
               to make my own,
               and you will rot in my hell
               as i grin eternity away.

your eyes, your eyes,
like god's chosen angels
gleaming and glimmering
just for me.

              your eyes--
              like rotted swine.
              i will replace them
              with hot jets of blood.

i would live
every tomorrow
just for you.

             you will not live
             to see another day.


              

Reviews

[Helena]

I loved the format and the ideas penned in this poem.

[Happy_in_Love]

Wow! Amazing write! I love it! So twisted. I was smiling the entire time

[Elena]

This is.. admittedly scary to read late at night. Very raw. Thumbs up (and down simultaneously for the goosebumps).

[MIngram]

This is a very thought provoking poem. It makes me wonder if this is how Schizophrenics really go about expressing themselves. Rich word choice. Keep it up.

[Miss Fox]

The contrast is stunning, and the format adds to this contrast. Well done.

[The Hopeless Writer]

nicely done and very thought out