still the dreamers (part two)

still the dreamers (part two)

A Poem by Daniel Atkinson
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a continuation of my previous poem.

"
we are those who whisper,
those who kiss
with leathery pursed lips.
do not mistake sand in an hourglass
for our heads of melting ice--
we are only fleetingly self-aware.

contentedly brief,
yet selfishly long-winded,
we the "people"
mistake ourselves for monuments--
lasting symbols
of a life less ordinary.

give us one more chance.
we'll create with it
scarecrows and ashen morality.

won't things ever change?

© 2011 Daniel Atkinson



Author's Note

Daniel Atkinson
I started writing this one as its own poem titled "those who whisper", and realized it would work as a continuation of "still the dreamers". It worked out well, I think.

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yes it did work out well! To say the least, I think it has a lot of originality. The 2nd stanza really grabbed me!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Loving this.. contentedly brief,
yet selfishly long-winded,
we the "people"
mistake ourselves for monuments--
lasting symbols
of a life less ordinary.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"we the "people"
mistake ourselves for monuments--
lasting symbols
of a life less ordinary."

I did pick a particularly deep and thoughtful quote, but it's all just as thought-provoking. Wonderful job.
By the way, you use the greatest adjectives.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Daniel Atkinson
Daniel Atkinson

Atlanta, GA



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