Things Falling Apart In Little Tiny Pieces

A poem about drug addiction.

Things Falling Apart In Little Tiny Pieces 

Take a breath between every compression

Try to be as immaculate as possible in every twitch

Don't let her slip away.. 

I left the love of my life at the front door

Along with the desolation that litters my clean floor

The memory of you sticks to this room like perfume. 

We use to run these halls in fast motion

Blurring the fabrics off our bereaved retrospection. 

All while we were smiling and laughing 

Levitation is possible when you know somebody like you

I never wanted to sink back down through the bed.

We use to fall asleep in slow motion

Holding each other while time fell backwards

All while we were looking into plastic dreams. 

I don't understand the politics of what wen't wrong

I just know you took one to many convulsions 

You managed to tear the wall frames apart. 

Without you I've been reduced to a poignant painting 

Addicted to scratching my arms and rubbing my eyes

All while I live in our precious outtakes

Why did I have to be just a few minutes late?

 

Don't fall asleep and choke on your own vomit baby, 

Please just don't fall asleep.. 

Author's Note

This poem was inspired from the season 2 finale of Breaking Bad when Jesse finds Jane overdosed and tries to revive her.

Reviews

[eeoopig]

Another sad and beautiful poem. It'd be terrible and heartbreaking to find someone you love like that: dead or unconscious due to drugs. Good work.

[Laura Maidah]

last two lines are monster. nice

[That_Girl]

A very scary sight... finding someone you love dead due to an addiction. Very well penned.

[Crimson_Catastrophe]

Love it. Savagely beautiful.
The imagery is great.

[Dark Angel]

wow..i like it a lot.

[Samantha Lynn]

I loved this. But then again I think I have been saying that to all of your poetry, haven't I? haha But it's always true. XD

One thing though... I usually don't question peoples poetry because I know that there are many ways to inturperret it all, but I don't really like the title. It doesn't pull me in as much as all you other poems. It might just be me though, but i beleive that the title is one of the most important parts. if the title isn't interesting then no one with even bother with the actual story or poem.

Is it just me?? lol

I think it would be better is "Things Fall Apart" or "Tiny Pieces" maybe? idk, again, that is just my opinion. :)

[Yheela]

A really captivating poem, giving me all these images that run like a memory in my head.
Brilliant and horrible (the subject, of course ) at the same time.

[Peaceworker22]

Wow, that is too bad.." wen't" (Lose the apostrophe and it'll be fine, it is supposed to be spelled "went") Good work!

[Pax]

i havent watch that show, im sure its amazing to inspire you this beautiful and tragic end ..poem.

[Mockingbird]

very tragic and morbid. there's nothing more difficult than walking into the room and seeing your loved one in the throes of dying due to suicide.