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A Poem by Cole Hayley
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alt title: "apple head"

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i don't breathe around you
i hold my heart in my throat until
the moment where it beats too much
and completely pushes my adam's apple up
and then, like eve in the garden, i swallow sin
whole 


© 2016 Cole Hayley


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Cole Hayley
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Shyness. Awe? A lot to wonder about the feeling. Nervousness. Another feeling of love perhaps, a feeling of yearning and desire so intense we feel our heart coming out of our chest. So much to say, so much we want to say, but then: we swallow all the words whole. The eve reference was wonderfully used in a refreshing manner, not cliched (or not too cliched). Well used! I wonder, is it swallowing our desire or are we being sinful by being silent and not letting the apple out?

You've made me think, and from such a short piece I appreciate it immensely. If the next pieces are as good as the first two you have a great series on hand here.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I really like this one. It is short, but says so much. The connection of the apple and the story of Adam and Eve is strong for me. I think this is one of my favorites.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Oh those sinful thoughts, swallowed.
Really like this one a lot.

Posted 7 Years Ago


this one really hits home for me, and it is amazing how your words have such a powerful effect even with so few of them. very striking, very inspiring, you have a real talent here, thank you for sharing

Posted 7 Years Ago


A powerful portrayal of the experience of awe.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Very creative, Cole. Great flow and imagery

Posted 7 Years Ago


Creative words here! Thank you for sharing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Wonderful work of art Cole. I love to dod Haiku poems for that reason. They are brief, but to the point. Great job.
Thannks
Doug

Posted 7 Years Ago


Strong ending to the amazing poetry. You create situation with a proper ending. Thank you Cole for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


Perfect! Concise, clear delivery. Just enough words and a fabulous last line: "like Eve in the garden, I swallow sin whole". Snare, snare...bass. Lands just right.

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Cole Hayley
Cole Hayley

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