To Paris, With Love

To Paris, With Love

A Poem by Colton Warr
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A dedication to the people of France. My prayers and heart are with each and everyone of you.

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To Paris, With Love 

A Poem by Colton Warr


They came with an attack from the shadows

Cowardly and unjust

Innocent bodies became a new home to their ammo

As viewers around the world looked on in disgust 


What we saw were not just raw images

Chaos and blood 

Our hearts are with you, no matter the distance

Let the response of the world overwhelm like a flood 


But people of France, now hear this

Let the prayers of earth become the smoke above your city

Let our retaliation be known, furiously and gritty

Let the nations of one world stand together as a committee


To the citizens of America, let us not forget 

Our brothers in arms died together not only in the colonies

But in Africa, Spain, Italy and Paree 

Now is the time to set the hounds free 


And to the humans of earth, you must not repent

For our sins are not sins, our vengeance will be just

Like lightning following thunder our enemies will soon be dust

I’m begging for a worldwide effort, I plead, we must 


So to the people of Paris, I urge your hearts

Sing your national anthem loud and gather in your streets 

For I am there with you as we declare that we are far from weak

It is clear, now, that we must all fight for peace  


© 2015 Colton Warr



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What a beautiful and heartfelt message for the people of France. I can tell you really feel an international solidarity.

"But people of France, now hear this
Let the prayers of earth become the smoke above your city
Let our retaliation be known, furiously and gritty"

That part was AWESOME.

"Let the nations of one world stand together as a committee."

And that line falls flat. Because of the word "committee." Committees aren't exciting. No one is like, "The committee is here! We're saved!"

Maybe instead, "As we, one world, stand in solidarity."

I don't know. Just not committee. Also, I would say "furious and gritty" instead of furiously and gritty. They're both adjectives that way.

I also wouldn't spell Paris like "Paree." The French way to say it is the write way to say it, and the French way to spell it is the right way to Spell it.

Overall, I think the verses can be made shorter and more concise and would sound more powerful to the reader that way.


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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I found this poem most interesting. The way you address people and countries in your poem has inspired my to do somthing similar. I look forward to more.

Posted 1 Year Ago


this is a great poem about such an awful tragedy

Posted 1 Year Ago


A most beautiful and telling piece, my prayers are with them also.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Dam fine work amigo and a hundred percent with you on that one
Cheers
Gonzo

Posted 1 Year Ago


I love this piece it's amazing and heartfelt.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Beautifully written and the hope peace will come to the world one day. Good vibes to you

Posted 1 Year Ago


I feel u man, you did a good writing, everything well placed.

Posted 1 Year Ago


What a beautiful and heartfelt message for the people of France. I can tell you really feel an international solidarity.

"But people of France, now hear this
Let the prayers of earth become the smoke above your city
Let our retaliation be known, furiously and gritty"

That part was AWESOME.

"Let the nations of one world stand together as a committee."

And that line falls flat. Because of the word "committee." Committees aren't exciting. No one is like, "The committee is here! We're saved!"

Maybe instead, "As we, one world, stand in solidarity."

I don't know. Just not committee. Also, I would say "furious and gritty" instead of furiously and gritty. They're both adjectives that way.

I also wouldn't spell Paris like "Paree." The French way to say it is the write way to say it, and the French way to spell it is the right way to Spell it.

Overall, I think the verses can be made shorter and more concise and would sound more powerful to the reader that way.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is an amazing poem, truly. A cry to stand together against the horrors of those who try to ruin all we know. And I especially like that you did not place focus on France alone, but mentioned the soldiers who died too, who should be avenged too.

You truly did an amazing job


Posted 1 Year Ago


Colton Warr

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! My prayers continue to go out to Paris as well as the rest of the wo.. read more
Colton, Well said, your words come from your heart and touched our souls. Richie B.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Colton Warr

1 Year Ago

You are too kind, Richie! I continue to pray for Paris and the rest of the world. That we may contin.. read more

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Colton Warr
Colton Warr

Lexington, KY



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