Angels of Fate

My darkest, deepest work yet....

“All I hear are the angels
The angels scream at me
For they are displeased
Displeased, for who I am and what I be

They are not the heavenly angels
For whom our great Lord those serve
They are the angels of fate
Whom hate me and give me what I’m told I don’t deserve

They want to smite me
To kick, burn, and bite me
But, instead, they trap me
And I am never free

Free of the hell I am forced to bare
Free of the guilt I feel I wear
Free of the people who do not care
But the prison just wont go away

The happiness I have to fake
The love I don’t love, I feel I must take
My heart which I know can no longer break
For it is no longer there

It is dust
Covered in rust
And I know that beat it must
But it’s lost all hope

Emptiness
What I wished that I now could only feel
But, instead, I am given pain
Which is very hard to heal

Mortals, like I, see not my cries
They see not how everyday more I die
They probably think my heart is strong enough that it healed
But with concrete is with what I tried to fill

I think the angels are now winning
For the room I’m in is spinning
And it feels as though I’m slipping into the abyss of a well
I wish you a happy life, and I give you a farewell”

Reviews

[Jeffrey Gershom]

This poem can speak volumes of despair and what we do cope with it. Yet, sometime it's just too much. I felt that despair and its affects in your poem.

It started out with a stable rythme and fluttered in the middle, then tried to recover in the end, as if to say, "No. Let me try again." Much like the actual beating of the heart. Then to make the heart stronger, you use concrete... something that would make the heart heavier.

Lots of emotion. Good work Compelling Composer!

[OT]

this is great!! you have quite a natural poetic touch! you say a lot and yet keep it in a rather simple form, a nice read!!

[NoAirToBreatheXSuffocat..]

Very good yet different. Not our average everyday Angel. I really liked it :))

[Light]

seemed like an emotional write; a very emotional write! Angels but not the type of Angels that we would be familiar with. Angels plotting our demise...ensnaring us...trapping us! this is good! i liked it!

[Tony]

Family can be tough sometimes-- but in the end they love us and we them. That's why they remain "angels" even when we're not seeing eye to eye. Just thought I'd share how your words moved me-- strong write no matter how you interpret it.

[Budd Black]

This is good, I am old school, so I prefer consistency in rhyming pattern. It disrupts the flow a little.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

I REALLY LIKE THE WAY YOUR FEELINGS FLOWED THROUGH OUT THIS POEM!